[Critique Group 1] Cleora's March notes

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[comments for Leonard
I didn't understand the within 60 yards of it's origin
as I reach the end, I came to the conclusion that it was a hedge 60 yards long
Sounds like a beautiful plant.
I love the tribute to the plants fall blossoms last chance before winter

[comments for Sally
If the poems tell a story, it may be easier to follow in chronological order.
In books I've read that have an explanation with a poem or pros, it has come before.
The only time it has been seperate, is when the explanation would be a spoiler.
If these are like the sample poems and pros you have been submitting to the group, I favor chronological order and the proes could be used to clarify what's going on in the background so the detail doesn't spoil the poem.

[comments for DeAnna
[comments for DeAnna
I would omit the word probably in reference to the big cat having sharp teeth and claws
at first I thought it was going to be about the courage of the dog facing a difficult challenge.
another story could be about how we don't know how something that seems impossible may turn out ok and having the courage to face the challenge.
Since it isn't, I don't see a good reason for the panther to be in this story.
The wolf talks about running in a pack.
Why is he hunting alone.
There are many other stories that could be spinoffs from this one.