[Critique Group 1] Sally's June comments for Leonard

[Sally Rosenthal]

Leonard, I love this poem; it perks me up with words just as the music does
for you.  Two small changes:  Does your mood "transmute" or transform?  To
me, "transform" seems to work better.  In the line beginning " the music
needs to," you need to add the word "be" after "to."  Otherwise, I wouldn't
change anything.

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