[Critique Group 1] cleora's december 2020 notes

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[comments for Marsha
I somewhat agree with some of what you say, but I'm not clear on exactly what you propose.
What about the student that has no particular interest?
Who is going to supervise this self directed learning?
Who is the audience?

[comments for leonard
You seem to be thinking a lot about death these days.
I'm glad you explained about that.
I remember my own feble and failed attempts to fly a kite.
But, I got to fly one my friends already had, and indeed it did give a feeling of freedom and soring.
A good analigy.

[comments for DeAnna
I recognize this as the same piece you submitted this time last year.
I like this new ending better. It really gives it a good finish.
As we discussed on the call. Your research indicates it's not necessary to give credit as long as you don't quote a line exactly.
Congratulations on getting your book about guidedogs in your life published.
This is a meaningful accomplishment you worked hard to enjoy.

[comments for Sally
I struggled with the last stanza.
I think it is a matter of punctuation as we all discussed to make it clear that it is pressent.