[Critique Group 1] cleora's august notes

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[comments for Sally
A beautiful short memory
As always it paints a picture of the memory with each additional line.
much like an artist paints or draws a picture with pen or brush.
Adding items one by one to complete the picture.
The only thing is 
I want it to have a meter or rhythm that I'm not finding.
But, it is fine as it is.

[comments for Marsha
Cleora: : In spite of myself I was chuckling from about half way thru on.
I'm not sure I would have done that if I hadn't known it wasn't supposed to be serious.
I understand.
I reread it realizing it was about the husband and not the father.
Don’t despair if it is a stroke, you can always ship him out to a nursing home.

[Comments for Leonard
My only question was if you were using ZoomText to enlarge the picture so you could see it better.

[comments for DeAnna
I love it.
Just my thing, anticipating how animals feel about some of the things we do.
I wonder if you could put a few lines in where the masked people further confuse Enzo by speaking to each other and him.