[Critique Group 1] Critiques for February 28th, 2018

[DQ Noriega]

Sally:

Kathy's Passing

Lovely, captures a grief so deep that no words can be forced through it. The
closing lines bring it to a gentle peaceful conclusion.Cleora:

Let Go My Sweet Potato Pie

There should be a comma after the word (possibvle).

I think you should finish the directions for the soy milk substitute when
you first begin discussing the idea.

I have never heard of a spelt tortilla.

Have you tried gluten free flour? I used it to bake a banana nut bread when
a friend came for dinner. I think it would work well for pie crust since the
main purpose for gluten is to hold a baked good together as it rises. Since
rising isn't part of piecrust, it shouldn't be a problem. I used Bob
Redmill's which is made with barbanzo bean flour. I think the article is a
good 

Concept. Have you considered a health food magazine?

 

Leonard,

A Horses Touch

The beginning is peaceful and sun-filled.Then the

Re is a note of anxiety as you try to meet the hunger among the horses.

At the end, it returns to peacefulness with a touch of sadness. The gentle
gratitude doesn't bring resolution since they will be hungry again. 

 

Marcia:

Shifting GearsShort, 

But does cover the elements of sudden change. Does a good job of explaining
the positive and negative elements present with each state. Could be
expanded a little I think.

D. Q. N. 

 

 

               

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