[Critique Group 1] Sally's August critiques

[Sally Rosenthal]

Cleora: I love this story. I have to remind myself that I am not reading a
published piece. It is filled with magic and imagination. The crystal ball
combines fairy tale imagery with today's technology which is a nice touch
for today's readers. There is one place where the verb "ran" should be "run"
since the sentence begins  "She had" which requires "run."  I am anxiously
waiting to see what happens next.

 

DeAnna:  I think you did an excellent job of describing what you and Curtis
were able to accomplish in Guam. Well done for your efforts and for your
description. When telling us about your new dog, your daughter plays a large
part, but your son is never mentioned after the adoption. How did he and
your dog relate? Or did they? The sections about the snowman, the walking
Wonder Bread, and the bear made me laugh so hard I cried. You did a good job
describing what it is like to have to retire a dog who wasn't a match.

 

Marcia:  Touche. This must have been fun to write.

 

Leonard: The initial poem evoked so many aspects of nature and the changes
the seasons bring to the world and to us. I loved the imagery and the visual
and emotional pulls they had on me.

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