[Critique Group 1] October 26, 2016 comments from Kate

[kathryngc at juno.com]

#Seventy-Seven and Holding
by Marilyn Brandt Smith
   I’m glad you had the author’s note, because there was a point where I
wondered if this was from a guide dog’s pov.
 
Was your sister-in-law living alone when she fell; although, it sounds
like she hadn’t lived alone for 12 years.
 
While I’m not yet 77, I have observed those around me and know that the
Golden Years are rather tarnished for many of us.
 
I found this piece fast paced, but, a bit confusing as it jumps from
topic to idea to reality. Well, okay, this is the new real life for this
lady now. 
 
# Community Radio
Mary Jo Lord
During the National Broadcast “this is just a test” tone, I’ve often
wondered what would happen if one didn’t have a radio.
 
I enjoyed this poem, but couldn’t identify the pattern.  The slightly
irreverent tone and lively repetition of key phrases make this piece fast
paced…until it is reduced to static!
 
Do you have a target market for this piece?
 
# Traditions
By DeAnna Quietwater Noriega
 
I absolutely love this piece and wish I’d had the nerve to follow through
with the tantrum in public. The closest I’ve come, is to shave the back
of my head when our recalcitrant daughter did it thinking it was cool. 
She (and I) let our hair grow back to normal lengths.
 
I thought the piece followed a logical arc and conclusion. 
 
Perhaps, since you pointed out the three different eye colors, you could
include other physical delineators eg hair color/length, similar family
traits.
 
# The Enterprising Entrepreneur
by C. S. Boyd
When you start by stating the date, your piece will quickly become
out-dated. Perhaps, start your essay with “Do your passion…”  Instead of
“They”, state why you’re writing this essay.
 
The way you phrase your vocational attention span and goal in life, etc.,
gives the reader the idea that this is going to be a joke or, at least, a
humorous lark rather than a bonafide business plan. Is this intentional? 
 
Check the spelling of Cragslist: Craig’s
 
Eventually, I just relaxed and enjoyed your tongue-in-cheek trials and
tribulations of trying to set up a simple, neighborhood Lemonade Stand. I
had a similar experience when I applied for my USA Passport!
 
#36. The Baby Can’t Go Home
By Kate Chamberlin
 
Many thanks for your suggestions. I purposely made the Social Worker a
non-entity to emphasize her archaic attitude toward the blind, rather
than recognize the blind mother’s abilities, experience, and support
network.
 
I like the idea of bringing more personality to the sympathetic nurses.
 
I will clarify the home visit as a precursor to the baby being allowed to
come home. 
 
I was dismayed to hear that the format of my submission was so far below
my own standards of quality and professionalism.  It would be an
automatic rejection by any publisher, so, I’ll drop out of the small
critique group until such time as I can rectify my computer’s issues with
formatting.
 
Again, thank you for the really good suggestions on my 3 pieces.
Happy Writing,
Kate

Kate Chamberlin
kathryngc at juno.com
kathryngc1 at verizon.net
"Dream it. Write it. Read it."
www.katechamberlin.com

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#Seventy-Seven and Holding
by Marilyn Brandt Smith
Author's Note: This poem represents my sister-in-law's current situation.
I guess I lost my balance, just don't know;
It made an awful racket when I fell.
They called for help, crying, of course I'll go;
Did I misstep? I thought I was doing well.
How many stitches needed? Thirty-three?
They stopped the flood, said blood was everywhere;
Testing overnight, then wait and see,
They must be sure at home I'll get good care.
Seventy-seven and holding, how I wish
For my downtown apartment and my cat;
Not someone else's choices in my dish;
It's been twelve years since I could live like that.
My sister Linda loves me, does her best;
My check let her quit work and stay at home,
But shopping, church, her doctors, and the rest
Mean sometimes I just have to stay alone.
Now, who will make the call, say yes or no?
I'm fragile, could soon fall again they say;
Linda sees me shutter, scared to know.
Without some change, they might send me away.
"Walk more; eat less; take pills!" I heard the voices;
But I ignored them, spoiled myself too much.
Now I'm angry, left with no good choices;
I grasp for hope, a laugh, a nurse's touch.
My nephew's daughter's here, no school today?
She helps me dress and hands me my old sweater;
Linda's shopping, cleaning, on her way!
We get another chance to do things better.
New shoes with treads, a walker, other tools;
Three times a week a nurse comes in. She's fine.
Three times a day it's Amber after school,
She'll work this Summer, wonder who they'll find?
I guess she pays attention, music's loud!
If I complain, she'd not be here at all.
They worry when I walk, but still we're proud,
The devil in the woodshed's my next fall.
# Traditions
By DeAnna Quietwater Noriega
Rafe Williams gave his sister Kirsten an apologetic glance and frowned at
his five year old son. Toby had thrown himself down in the aisle of
The grocery store in front of the candy rack screaming and kicking his
feet. Kirsten began to giggle. 
“You could try mom’s method to handle a tantrum, I dare you!” she said.
Her green eyes twinkled up to meet his gray ones. Rafe carefully lowered
his six foot four inch frame to the floor a few feet from his hysterical
firstborn son. He took a deep breath and began to wail
And kick his feet. An elderly woman who was about to turn her cart down
their aisle reversed course and scurried away. When his shocked child
stopped yelling and gazed in open mouthed horror, Rafe turned his head to
meet the boy’s
astonished blue eyes.
“I can yell louder than you can any day bucko,” Rafe stated firmly.” I
said no candy and I meant it. Now get up and let’s say
we are sorry to your aunt Kirsty for making such a scene.”
Kirsten leaned down to lend her brother a hand in climbing to his feet.
“I didn’t think you would do it here in public. When Mom did it to me, we
were all sitting
down to dinner and I wanted Fruit Loops instead of liver and onions!”
“Why wouldn’t I use the Williams family tried and true tantrum cure?”
Rafe replied as he brushed off his khaki trousers. “It worked on me as
eldest child down
to you as the baby of the five Williams kids. We each only tried throwing
a fit once apiece. Mom said kids hate it when their parents embarrass
them and it is payback for all of the times the children embarrass their
parents.”
 
#
#36. The Baby Can’t Go Home
   “There’s no way you can take your new-born home from the hospital,” a
Social Worker in the delivery suite told Grace.
   Grace couldn’t believe her ears. Didn’t the records show that during
her pregnancy, she and Ken had taken parenting classes, natural
childbirth classes, toured the hospital, and been well prepared for the
birth of their first baby, William?
   “I had baby-sat nieces and nephews without a problem, Grace said
around the brick in her throat, trying to stay calm despite the tears
stinging her eyes. “My Mother and I have had many conversations about
childcare. I am healthy. My baby is healthy. Why, on earth, can’t I take
my baby home?”
   “Well, you’re blind. You can’t see if the baby has a nose bleed,” the
SW said. “How would you ever know if he has a diaper rash or Thrush? How
could you ever measure and mix the baby’s formula and pour it into the
bottle?”
   The delivery nurse brought William to Grace and waited until he
latched on properly to her breast for lunch.
   “Here’s the answer to how I can feed my baby,” Grace said fondling his
fuzzy, perfect little round head.
   The SW sniffed and huffed out of the room, holding her clipboard
against her chest. Grace knew that although she’d won that skirmish,
there would be more to come in the war.
   “Ken,  they won’t let us bring William home,” Grace groaned when he
came in that evening. “Before now, I’ve never felt like ripping off
someone’s face!”
   “Grace,” he said  kissing her tear stained cheeks and her trembling
lips, “you’re a teacher. This may be the most important lesson you’ll
ever teach”
   The next morning, the SW came back to grill Grace on how she would
take care of an infant.
  “How will you change the baby’s diaper?” she asked, so, Grace went over
to the maternity suite’s bassinet where William was waking up.
   “I learned from changing my nephew’s diapers that you always keep
everything covered,” Grace said as she demonstrated her technique. 
“Then, with a moist baby wipe, I make a "Y" patterned swipe to make sure
whatever smells so bad gets cleaned off. I have the clean, disposable 
diaper open and ready to "lift butt, insert diaper and tab shut" in one
fell swoop.  The lidded pail for dirty diapers is next to the bassinet
and all my supplies are within my easy reach, but out of William’s little
hands.”    
   Grace then wrapped William in a soft receiving blanket by lying him on
it with his head on the top corner, bringing up the bottom corner to
cover his legs; crossing the right corner over his body, snuggling his
arms underneath it; bringing the left corner over the right; and snugging
the Bottom corner over both the right and left edges. Grace picked
William up, neatly bundled into his blanket, being careful to support his
head with her hand.
   As Grace nursed William, the SW asked, “How will you give the baby a
bath?” 
    “ Our shower head is on a six-foot hose. I’ll put the shower head on
the floor of the tub,” Grace said. “ Then place a hand towel on the
bottom and wet it with warm water - keeping the shower running. After
William is stripped lying on a dry towel on the floor next to the tub,
I’ll lift him into the tub and lay him face up on the warm towel. This
leaves one hand to hold the shower head and one hand to roam around his
body to guide the water stream. My nephew loved the gently tickling of
the warm shower before and after I lathered him with a sponge loaded with
gentle body wash lotion.
   “When we're finished, I’ll open the dry towel and hold it under each
of my arms across my chest; lift William up and place him against me;
bring the other end of the towel around him, and, voila, one baby washed
and wrapped in a warm towel ready to be dried and dressed.”
   The SW wrote something down on her clipboard as Grace moved William to
her shoulder to pat his back. William produced a gentlemanly burp and
Grace laid him on his side in the bassinet. With his dry diaper, full
belly, and a warm bed, William went right to sleep without a fuss.
    The training nurse, who had been standing by, complimented Grace on
her handling of William, but, the SW didn’t say a word as she huffed out 
of the room.
   “I don’t think the SW was impressed this morning,” Grace said to Ken
when he visited in the evening.
   Ken kissed her and said, ”You’re a great teacher. You’ll win her over
yet.”
    
 
#37. The Home Visit
   The SW was prompt for her appointment with Ken at their home.
   “How can newlyweds afford a home like this?” she asked.
   Ken wanted to tell her that wasn’t any of her business, but, knew it
wouldn’t do any good to alienate the Social Worker. “Grace and I waited
to get married until after we graduated from college and had jobs. She’s
a Natural Sciences teacher and I’m a Professor at the Eastman School of
Music.”
    “Grace won’t be working for a while, will she?  How will you keep up
payments on your bills?” she pried.
   “Grace and I agreed from the beginning that we’d live on my salary .
We’ve put her salary into savings. Now, aren’t you here to see where
William will sleep?”
   Ken showed her into the light, airy corner room they had prepared for
William. Pale blue walls coordinated with the blue plaid drapes. The
wooden crib had a firm mattress made up with white linen sheets and a
blue quilt that matched the ruffle surrounding the mattress.  The
vertical spindles were close enough so William wouldn’t get his head
through them. The change table,  was a safety rail atop a sturdy dresser
with drawers for William’s clothes where Grace had everything close at
hand, but, not close enough for a curious child to grab. A lidded diaper
pail stood ready on the floor next to the change table. The comfortable
rocking chair’s arms seemed poised to embrace a nursing mother and her
babe. The day-bed sported a variety of stuffed Teddy Bears, Snoopy Dogs,
and cuddly kittens, not to mention a Dapper Dan waiting patiently to
teach his boy how to zip his coat, button his shirt, snap his pants, and
tie his shoes.
   The SW wrote something on her clipboard, thanked Ken, and left.
    “I don’t know what she thought,” Ken said that evening when he
visited Grace. “She didn’t say anything.”
   “I’m taking William down to the nursery,” the maternity suite nurse
said as she bustled in to Grace’s room.
   Ken saw Grace’s face go pale and he put his hands over her clenched
fist before she could say anything.
   “Are you two ready for your complimentary steak and sparkling grape
juice dinner? The candles are already lit. I’ll take William into the
nursery so you can enjoy your last quiet dinner together.” She winked at 
     them as the aide ushered them to the dining room.
   It was a sure sign that William would be going home with them in the
morning. They’d won the war.
 
#   The Enterprising Entrepreneur
by C. S. Boyd
Back in 2011, I took a course in being self-employed. One of the
assignments required me to come up with a type of business and go through
all the steps, fictitiously of course, of going through the process of
getting it started.
Do your passion, they say. Find what you love. What you would do whether
you were paid or not and make that your life's work. The money will
follow. Clearly, this assignment is my opportunity to put together a plan
to start my business. Problem is, I have a 10 year vocational attention
span. Throughout my life, the only thing I have done consistently and
with a passion, is nothing. My goal in  life -- retirement.
After much thought, I decided to do the research on having a lemonade
stand. It’s simple, easy to fix lemonade, low startup cost, ready market
(most people like lemonade), readily available customers in the form of
joggers and neighbors out for an afternoon stroll. To complete my
marketing and business plan, all I need is what licenses, permits, and
other particulars I may need to get started.
Day 1:
2:29pm I called the city inspector's office
Honestly, while I waited on hold, I wondered if I could do it with a
business this simple. I couldn't imagine there was much to it, but I
forged ahead.
Eventually, a person with a pleasant sounding voice came on the line.
"Does a person need anything to start up a lemonade stand," I asked.
"I don't know. You need to talk to the city office," she said.
I thought that's what I was talking to. Oh well, whatever. "do you have
that number?" I asked.
She gave me the number and transferred me.
A few minutes later.
What sounded like an older woman answered.
I told her what I needed.
I was told I needed to talk to Planning and Development .
She gave me the number and transferred me.
A few audible clicks and a moment of silence later, an automated system
answered.
"Planning and development," it announced.
. I punched buttons for the choice that seemed to match best. 
"Your call is very important to us. Please stay on the line for the next
available agent."
Does anyone other than callers ever listen to these hold tapes?
Ten minutes later I decided to hang up and try again after getting some
lunch.
4:44 PM still day 1: 
I dialed the city Planning and Development number.
Someone identifying herself as Laura. answered
Shocked by the sound of a live person, my mind went blank. I paused
desperately trying to remember why I had called.
"Does a person need anything to open a lemonade stand at the curb in
front of their house?" I stammered .
"You need a certificate of occupancy," she said.
"A what?" I asked.
"The person will be conducting business on the property, right?"
"Um, yes, I guess so."
"Then, the area has to be zoned for a business."
"But, this is just a little lemonade stand,"  I said.
"There will be people stopping. in front of the residence so it needs to
be zoned for a business. You can get a permit for 30% business 70% home.
You may also need a permit from the health department, since the product
is something that will be consumed by the public."
"How much is the certificate,” I asked.
"$120," she replied.
I was dismayed. "Isn't this a little like when a person has a garage
sale?" I argued. " Could the person have the lemonade stand as part of
the garage sale and use that permit?
"Yes," she said. "as long as the lemonade stand is actually in the garage
sale.
"How much is the garage sale permit?"
"a garage sale permit is free. It is for 3 consecutive days only and
there is a limit of two per year."
So much for that idea. I really wanted to do the business for more than
six days.
"Goodness," I said. "I was just thinking about a simple child's lemonade
stand. Something for a child to make a little money for the summer. the
stand likely wouldn't make enough to pay for the certificate and It
probably wouldn't be worth the effort for just 6 days."
"Oh," she said, "no certificate is required for a child's stand."
But, you still need to contact the health department."
Suddenly, I was struck with inspiration.
remembering a man who sells onion rings and hotdogs out of a trailer he
parks on the Home Depot parking lot, I asked about having the stand in a
neighborhood park.
“You will need permission from the parks department,” she said.
Thinking ahead, "Just in case, what is needed to get the permit for the
garage sale?"
“Call and give name address number and date of sale. Only one sign in the
yard for advertising is permitted. You could also post it on a community
board and cragslist. the garage sale permit is for three consecutive days
only and there is a limit of two per year.”
5:09 PM Day One: 
I Called the city health department.
The automated system picked up.
"consumer health," it said "The office is now closed. Our  hours are
8:00am to 5:00pm  Monday thru Friday."
I left a message on their voice mail.
1:30pm Day two: 
I started by calling the city parks department. 
"You will need approval."
"Approval?"
"Yes,  from Contract Compliance."
Yet another department. Why am I not surprised?
"I think you will also need a Health permit," he adds.
I remembered once when I went to the bank and they were selling baked
goods to raise money for some charity.
"a church or other nonprofit organization also needs a health permit," he
told me.
He gave me the number for contract compliance and transferred me.
A few minutes later.
"Contract Compliance," answered someone identifying himself as Will.
I ask about having a lemonade stand at a neighborhood park.
"The vendor has to sign a written contract agreement for a 15% / 85%
split for a non-profit organization. The split for a for profit
organization is 30% / 70%, and an audit process will be set up in order
to verify receipts.
state law says city has to recoup some of the cost"
I'm wondering what cost the city is recouping but I don't ask.
"all vendors are required to have liability insurance of at least $500
thousand to max of one mil depending on the type of business.
Insurance is around $300 per month
This is in case someone is injured in the park as  a result of the
stand."
I ask if I could set up the stand at the curb. That way the stand is not
on the park.
Will points out that if the customers are standing on park ground the
park rules will still apply.
"what if it is set up so the customers have to step off the park to make
their purchase?"
"That will involve the transportation department
"The vendor will need a Health permit,"  he makes sure to tell me. "I can
transfer you if you like." he offers.
I still haven't received a call back from the Health Department. 
"okay," I agree.
A few clicks and a ring later, Kim at the Health Department answers.
"You need to talk to hazel at the peace center to get the permit for a
lemonade stand," she says.
Strange name but this group checks to see that the stand is co compliant.
That is, insures that the stand complies with the following standards:
* The stand has to be covered.
To meet this standard, the vender can lease one or more of the sheltered
structures in the park.
This structure, called a pavilion, leases for $35 per day per structure.
It can be anything from a building to a picnic table. as long as it has a
roof over it.
"I thought picnic tables were there for the public to use." I protest.
"Yes, you can use one without paying," she says, "but, if someone shows
up with a lease, you have to move.
People lease them for picnics, birthday parties, weddings, etc.
Or, you can set up your own stand as long as it has a roof.
"What if the stand is in the street beside the park?" I ask.
"I'll have to check and call you back," she says. 
2:18PM Day two: 
I'm beginning to understand why most businesses don't make a profit for
the first five years. Looks like I'm going to need that loan section of
the Business Plan after all.
I am transferred to hazel of the peace center and leave a message on her
voice mail.
I smile to myself remembering that Hazel was the name of the maid for the
Baxter household.
2:21PM still day two:
Meanwhile, will (contract compliance) has returned my call and left a
message.
If the vendor sets up his stand at the curb, the area needs to be coned
off but he doesn't have to work with transportation because his people
are on the park grounds.
If the stand is set up so customers are standing in the street, it
interferes with public right of way and would require dealing with the
city transportation and public works Department.
He left the number for Gordon  at city transportation and public works.
2:31PM Day Two: 
Gordon at city transportation and public works tells me that permits may
also require insurance
He will check around and see what he can find out
I am to call him back if I don't hear from him by tomorrow
2:46pm Day Two: 
I try again to reach hazel at the peace center 
johnnie answers and transfers me to Bob 
According to Bob, a Health permit can only be issued to an establishment
that has permanent plumbing.
One exception is they could issue a temporary Health permit in
conjunction with an event.
A temporary health permit costs $50 for one day $15 each additional day
up to 14 days
It has to be in conjunction with an event and a garage sale qualifies as
an event. 
Well, back to the garage sale unless I could have my stand in conjunction
with some event at the park.
We now know that
1. food cannot be served to the public without some kind of permit,
2. hard plumbing and other things are required for a permanent permit,
and preparing the lemonade inside the house for sale at the stand doesn't
satisfy this requirement.
3. The vender must have a city food handling card. the vendor must attend
a one hour food handling class at $16 in order to get A city Food
Handling Card. 
The class covers the codes to follow:
- method of hand washing 
- keeping the product cold
- type of overhead protection, 
- method of washing utensils - need 3 little boles to wash bleach
chlorine test strips to check the sanitary level. 
I can check with the state of Texas for a complete list of the codes.
Supposedly these codes have been in place for 50 years and are the same
for all cities in Texas.
It is all part of the  FDA food code.
I missed my chance to have a lemonade stand by 50 years.
I Could still have it at the park but would need an event of some type.
Maybe I could get with the local kids and have a turtle race or
something.
We could put a cup of lemonade at the end of the walk way to entice the
turtles to race toward a drink.
I wonder if I would need a permit to use the walkway as a race track.
Based on what I've learned so far, I could put cones at each end of the
race way and then cone off the area around the  race way for attendees to
stand and root for their favorite turtle while sipping their $10.95 cup
of lemonade.
It would be fun. But, then, why should anyone pay to see a race they can
just slip inside the coned area and watch for free.
I guess that's out. Back to the garage sale .
Okay, let's review what we know so far.
I can't have a lemonade stand at home because it would interfere with
traffic. I could have it at home if I had it in conjunction with a garage
sale, but then I could only have it for a total of 6 days in one year.
I could have it at the park, as long as I have it in a covered stand and
in conjunction with an event.
If I park my stand on the street, I still have to have insurance because
my customers would either be standing on the park or in the street. No
hovering near the stand, please.
If I arranged it so they had to stand in the street, I need to cone off
the street and have a permit and one million dollar liability insurance
in case a customer gets ran over.
It's cheaper to have it in the park. That liability insurance is only for
500 thousand liability. But, to get the health permit I have to have it
with an event.
To get the temporary permit, I must 
attend the food handling class  to get my Food Handling Card,
come in and apply for a temporary  health permit,
get the garage sale permit,
make a sign to advertise my garage sale and find a community board to
post the event on,
arrange for an inspection the day of the event
find some junk to sell at my garage sale so I will have customers to buy
$500 worth of lemonade.
3:22PM Day 2: 
This was an eye opener. If it was this much trouble to have a simple
child's lemonade stand, how did anyone ever start a real business? 
I still needed to talk to Hazel to get final information to complete my
assignment.
I tried to call her again and was transferred to bob of code compliance
consumer affairs.
I got his voice mail and left a message.
Then I thought of another question and called back. By chance I was
transferred to Wendy. 
She told me about something called the cottage industry bill passing this
year.
She couldn't (i.e. not permitted) tell me much about it but encouraged me
to google cottage food industry bill in Texas
But, she went ahead and told me the following:
There is a limit of $50,000 per year,
Goods can only be sold in person from the person's home, 
the customer has to come to the home and pick up the item and pay for it
in person,
items may not be sold on the internet -- no ebay, Amazon, or through a
website where the customer adds the item to a shopping cart and pays for
it.
- the vender may have a website where the goods are advertised, but no
shopping cart to add the item to and pay for it.
Goods sold cannot need refrigeration.
If the business can meet the requirements of the bill, a health permit is
not needed.
Basically, any baked good that does not require refrigeration may be sold
from out of the home.
The bill is very specific about what can be sold.
The list includes, cookies, pies, cakes, pastries, breads, Danish,
donuts, canned jams and jellies, and dried herb mixes (must be an herb
and not a spice). If the item is not on the list, it may not be sold.
Day 4: 12/15/11 
9:53am Bob from city consumer health division 
returned my call and left a message.
11:44am I called him back
He clarified that 
- the lemonade stand must be outside the house and must be covered,
- the garage is considered to be in the house - putting the stand in the
garage doesn't meet the "covered" requirement
- a temporary Health permit may be issued for a lemonade stand that is
run in conjunction with a garage sale or other event.
With regard to the Cottage Industry
- the sellers could bake cookies at the house and sell them in the house.
garage qualifies as in the house
- there is a $50,000 per year limit on sales
house bill may be 170
try googling Texas cottage food law
Day 4: 
googled Texas cottage food law.
The law was signed into effect by Governor Rick Perry on June 17, 1911.
Summary of sections 5 and 6 of the bill, which pertain to Cottage Food
Operations.
1. Food must be sold from your home, directly to another consumer.  No
sales at farmer's markets, county fairs, roadside stands, local
festivals, craft shows, wholesale, or resale to restaurants, grocery
stores, coffee shops, etc.  The food must be purchased at your home.
2. Foods are limited to non-potentially hazardous baked goods (cookies,
cakes, breads, Danish, donuts, pastries, pies, and other items that are
prepared by baking the item in an oven), canned jams, jellies, and dry
herb mixes. THESE ARE THE ONLY FOODS ALLOWED.  If you do not see it on
this list, it's not allowed.
3. Annual gross income from sales of above food items must be $50,000 or
less.
4. The local health department may not regulate these home cottage food
operations, but they must maintain a record of any complaint made.  This
is a consumer safeguard, so that consumers can call the local health
department and check for complaints on their "cake lady" before they
purchase, if they wish.
5. The food items sold must be labeled with the name and address of the
cottage food production operation, and a statement that the food was not
inspected by the health department.  
Per Representative Kolkhorst, the label does not have to be affixed
directly to the food item, it can be handed to the customer.  
You will need to have labels with your name, address and the statement
"This food is not inspected by the state health department or a local
health department." 
Temporary labeling information provided by the Farm and Ranch Freedom
Alliance.
6. Food must not be sold through the internet.  This simply means that
these operations can't set up a shopping cart on your web site and let
people purchase blindly.  The "no internet sales" clause goes back to the
fact that we ARE small "cottage" operations, and helps ensure that sales
are local and face-to-face, which is in keeping with the spirit of the
bill.   Again, it does NOT mean that web sites are prohibited.  Web
sites, Facebook pages, Twitter, and any kind of marketing you want to do
are all perfectly allowable.  Just don't allow purchase and payment on
the internet. 
7. The bill went into effect 9/1/2011.
It was an interesting assignment and I learned a lot about how government
at all levels has infiltrated our lives.
I googled the bill again in preparation for this article and found that
many changes have been made in the bill. For one thing, it is not as
strict as it was originally. While having a lemonade stand has basically
been illegal for the last 50 years, and still requires a Health permit, a
Cottage Industry business does not. The Cottage Industry Bill has made it
possible for people to have a small low cost business out of their home
that even children can participate in.
Details can be found at 
http://www.nbcdfw.com/video/#!/news/local/Educating-the-Public-on-the-Cot
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# Community Radio
 
Keep this station programmed in your car.
It will be a valuable resource, 
should an emergency arise.
Should there be a: 
storm, drought, flood, or high winds.
Should there be: 
wild fires, a terrorist attack, a serial killer on the loose or a massive
power outage.
 
We will inform you of any and all
necessary preparative actions
that should be taken and evacuation routs, 
even if you have lost all means of communication or reception and
our tower has been destroyed and
we are reduced to static.
 
Keep this station programmed in your car.
During a nonemergency, 
we will broadcast the weather, brought to you by
The National Weather Service.
We will only interrupt this broadcast
when they are reporting today's weather, or
projected conditions for the week.
We will preempt the forecast with an announcement touting all of the
valuable information this station will report to city residents and
visitors
in case of an emergency, 
followed by a portion of the mayor's speech from last year.
 
As the weather broadcast returns, your car heads
out of town and we
fade to static.

On Thu, 20 Oct 2016 10:46:02 -0400 Tuchyner5--- via Group1
<group1 at bluegrasspals.com> writes:
Hi Group 1,
 
The order of pieces to be critiqued is alphabetical, starting with the
second letter of the first names.  Thus, it is as follows:
 
Marilyn
Mary Jo
Kate
Deana
Terrie
 
I will monitor that order, as well as being the time keeper and general
keeper of keeping us on track.  
 
I would like someone to volunteer for making and keeping the order of
presenters of their critiques. Otherwise, I’ll handle that chore as well.
 
I’m looking forward to our session.
 
Leonard


Kate Chamberlin
kathryngc at juno.com
"Dream it. Write it. Read it."
www.katechamberlin.com
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