[Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Joan's piece

[leonard tuchyner]

She is suddenly transported to another way of being.

She becomes one  with  the wind,

the trees, the sun, the light.

They are her and she is them.

Experiencing flight as part of the experience,

she is free.

Flying and free are similies for each other.

It is an exalted way of being.

Even her name is part of the experience.

The poem also says the elements are inside her

which means an inside and an outside.

So, she doesn’t lose a part of her which is her identity,

like her name. I

I like the way the lines here reflect the experience.

The experience has a beginning,but does not include coming back down.

This is truly transformative.



Joan sub for August 23, 2023



by Joan Myles



she feels the sun

on her face and suddenly



she is

free and flying far above



the trees the light

inside her all around



the wind and her wings are

one and the same



One

with her name



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