[Critique Group 2] FW: critique gr2 poem for 2-23-23

[Valerie Moreno]

critique gr2 poem for 2-23-23
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Original Message: 
From: Valerie Moreno <spiritwind at pmpmail.com>
To: Valerie Moreno <spiritwind at pmpmail.com>
Subject: critique gr2 poem for 2-23-23
Date: 
Mon, 6 Feb 2023 11:48:10 -0600

Aftermath

Stunned,
taken aback,
I realize we 
are not friends
anymore.

This cuts me
like falling on rocks,
bare feet on broken shells
near the tumbling
ocean.

You demand attention
with strings attached--
The balance wobbles,
falls through.

Too many conditions,
bully-streaks
mar a one tranquil
equality.

Sadly,
a door closes,
pain colors grief
purple and black,
until reason glimmers,
pinpricks of rezilliance
breaking again.

Valerie Moreno
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Preach the Gospel at all times and if necessary use words.
 -St. Francis Of Assisi