[Critique Group 2] Leonard's belated comments on Joan's March piece

[Leonard Tuchyner]

Basically, I don’t have a clew to this one. 

It has something to do with a paper crain. 

It seems you have been making them since childhood. 

The urge to make one today is very strong. 

You can’t resist the insistent calling. 

His knocking on  your doorfor attention to fold him. 

In a strange way, in a magical way, 

he pokes his imaginary head around the refrigerator. 

You finally give in and start folding. 

You feel the air refresh as if you opened a door. 

You have given into your childhood compulsion to make a papercrain. 

Hooray. 

If this is any where near to your intension I’ll be verysurprised. 

 

Joan sub for March 23

 

 

aper Cranes Don’t Fold Themselves

by Joan Myles

 

you’ve heard plenty of her squawks and fluffles 

enough to wake you from good sound dreaming

 

but this morning right there in your kitchen

she’s checking the eggs for counterfeits

 

and if you make the grade she’ll move in

as for the colorful stuff

 

Boy he’s been hanging around for a long time

right outside your door since childhood

 

he wonders where you are

 why you won’t take his calls anymore

 

desperate he bangs all the louder

do something he yells through the keyhole 

 

the crane cocks her head around the fridge dorr 

nods and strikes a pose

 

the door flies open with a rush of fresh air

and you commence to fold

 

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Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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