[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Remembering To Be Free-modified via Group-2 feedback

[jamesstarfire at gmail.com]

Hey There Friends of Group-2,

When ever you can steal a free moment, I would be very interested in any and
all opinions as to whether the changes are an improvement.
Many Thanks, Brad
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  Remembering To Be Free
C Brad Corallo
Word count 187 

Emulating Marley's ghost,
we may forge our own chains.
Though such aren't always ours to earn.
Guilt, regret or just being in the world
can provide the requisite cold iron.
Self made purgatories and artificial prisons beckon.

As the weight of the years falls upon us,
truly feeling free can become illusory. 
Some build cages of the mind.
Punishing themselves over
paltry breadcrumb sins. 
While others drained by far too much loss
lose hope and forever dwell,
isolated, within unyielding incarceration. 

We may come to learn in time
that freedom is anything but free!
Nor is it a word for 
"nothing left to lose,"
as the song suggests. 

Rather, it is an untrammeled   path of being
for engaging with the world. 
There are transparent barriers to dodge,
Lies that can ensnare and
compromise sincere open-hearted efforts. 

At such times we must
remember who and what we are!
Though we are constrained by gravity and
the maintenance of our bodies.
Our minds and hearts 
are still undeniably our own! 


NOTE: Quoted line adapted from: Me and Bobby McGee by Kris Kristofferson

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