[Critique Group 2] Leonard'sbelated comments for Val

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

Uplifting. 



Hopeful. 



It is interesting that we got a taste of Spring yesterday. 



I actually got out into my garden.  



Good title. It sahs we are not really there yet. 



But we are looking forward with anticipation. 



Except for one change in words, this is very tight.  



Good use of alliteration.




 


Val Feb sb 21




When Spring Comes




 


Such joy will be when spring comes!



Voices full of ease and laughter,



children racing one another in the park—




 


Perhaps, Just racing in the park would be better.




 


nature nodding approval with brilliant colors.




 


Perhaps, the lonely, dreary Winter



is truly passed



withanxiety, loss and fear



fading in tranquil sun.




 


How we want this!



crying out as we turn toward light,



holding hope like a lit candle



until Spring comes.




 


Valerie Moreno



All people may not be capable of doing great things, peopleare able to



do small things with great love.



-St. (Mother) Teresa of Calcutta




 


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