[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Moonrise Over Belize- Brad's piece for September 24th, 2020

[Joan Myles]

So sweet to know you will be with us, Brad!
Here's my piece.
Joan
***

Origins
c Joan Myles

I was born in a pool of waiting
so plainly
the plan shaped me

Before their labels and test tubes

Before their throbbing smiles and foggy hands

Claimed me

I jumped up and ran

No matter my paralysis

The air opened itself

Free as my breath declared me


On Mon, Sep 21, 2020 at 10:57 AM James <jamesstarfire at gmail.com> wrote:

> Hey There Friends of Group 2
>
> I have had multiple computer issues and email and internet were down since
> the 16th. I can't for the life of me find Joan's piece for this session. I
> went through about 100 emails. If someone could forward it as soon as may
> be, I'd greatly appreciate it. Enclosed and attached, please find my piece
> of flash fiction for our upcoming session.
> Sure is great to be back!
> BC
> ***
>
> Moonrise Over Belize
>
> C By Brad Corallo
>
> Word count 502
>
> I wasn't planning on taking this vacation at all. It was one of those
> impulsive decisions for which I am far from being famous. My friend Calvin
> and his family sort of talked me into it and my good buddy, Ryan was
> delighted when the potential vacation idea was floated in his direction.
> Since we would be staying at a beach resort in distant Belize, we all felt
> like we were leaving Covid 19 behind as much as is possible these days.
>
> We were fortunate to score a direct Delta flight and we all sprang for
> first
> class seating. So by the time we arrived at our resort, "Sun, Sand and
> Peace" we were all feeling no pain or concern. How little did we know then?
>
> It so happened toward the end of our stay, that one lovely evening we
> gathered with new friends we had bonded with at the resort, and found are
> selves all hanging on a heart breakingly beautiful tropical beach. Most of
> us held tall glasses containing a multi-colored array of heavily fortified
> Caribbean beverages. There was a small Rum distillery on premises which was
> rightfully locally beloved. The day was gradually fading into twilight.
> Behind us, paths transected the lush jungle flora. Reggae music, wafted
> from
> the distant elegant beach cafe which was one of our favorite spots at the
> resort.
>
> Happy children were splashing in the ocean, calling to each other and
> batting around a soccer ball. Its picturesque arcing through the sky of
> darkening evening caught my attention for a memorable few moments.
>
> Suddenly, Hank, the buzz-cut verbose American tourist, who was gazing at
> the
> horizon and focusing his precision German optics declaimed "Not good! I see
> what looks like eight vessels heading toward this beach." As they grew
> closer, all could see large bore guns mounted fore and aft on swivels . The
> creased and battered metallic hulls were of some color between green and
> dirty grey. Each craft held at least 10 men dressed in cammo.
>
> The beach became more and more deserted as the gunboats drew slowly closer.
>
> "Here we go again, get out of the water and come with me quickly" A dark
> eyed, anxious mother entreated her children loudly. Placing a calming hand
> on my shoulder, Calvin opined: "could be a party,
> could be a war. Well, we'll know soon enough. Let's go have a glass of
> wine.
> Whatever's coming, there's nowhere else to go."
>
> "Hel, let's have a bottle instead and it's my treat!" I said resignedly
> thinking that actually it might be my last treat in more ways than one. It
> was an immediately sobering realization that just taking a vacation could
> potentially alter one's life for the worst in ways never anticipated. One
> suddenly realizes that all our lives could go drastically south, as the
> night deepens and before the moon fully rises over the beautiful welcoming
> land of Belize.
>
> Inspired by:" Waiting for the Moon."
>
> By Bruce Cockburn. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v4N3M_gcKX20
>
> jamesstarfire at gmail.com
>
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