[Critique Group 2] Emailing: City Serenade--For 3-19-20 critique session

[James]

City Serenade
C By Brad Corallo
Word count 291

The 2 bit, counterfeit biker boy
with his Kawasaki and his vinyl jacket
brags about, he's on the street
but his dad's in a high tax bracket.

And scarred little Tommy-Suzie
tryin' to figure out what she is.

Wanna speculate in real estate?
Those nice gents in suits, scam masters, connected brutes.
Chances are you'll buy a farm. 
fast and without a trace. 
Cops just shake their heads, not our business!
Absolutely, no alarm!

Wheelchair veteran, greasy matted hair
hangs on the corner with his flag and cup.
Aint getting much action today.
Zoned out people, shuffle by 
no earthly reason to look up.

And 2 blocks down, an African guy in a turban
is preaching for Jesus and redemption.
Handin' out soup kitchen chits and holy tracts.
but no body pays attention!

In the park by the old war monument,
currency and product change hands
Business school dropouts, black market sharps
offer Chemdog and MexStar, top name brands

Screech of sirens as the cops 
blow down 53rd chasin'
some unholy maniac in a djellaba,
wielding a loaded cross bow
screaming something about justice!

Air horns blow, air breaks grab.
Buses push ahead, cars backfire.
Are those gunshots?
Doesn't matter, no one pays any mind. 

Hordes of people hurry down broken sidewalks.
Trying to get from here to there with minimal eye contact. 

Wafting smells of Italian food cooking
mingle with scents of overflowing litter baskets. 

Just another day in the city.
Where life is on the cheep
and uptown players look so pretty.

Down a filthy alley
spatter-dot painted with trash and broken glass-
behind a dumpster reeking from rotting restaurant scraps-
A gray, stray flea bitten tabby
tenderly suckles her new born kittens.  

jamesstarfire at gmail.com
  
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