[Critique Group 2] reminder and submission for Jan 21

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Hi Writing  buddies,
One again it is time for  making your submissions.  And just to prove it, I'm putting my offering below.
Leonard -------

Walking a Straight Line




 


Can you stride a straight line with your eyes shut tight?



Sounds pretty modest, I must admit.



With eyes free to see, I choose my route.



Wherever   my fancytakes me, I go. 



With vision shuttered, that’s anyone’s guess. 



Whatever my final terminus 



is a random, meaningless affair of fate, 



one which only the Shadow knows. 




 


If you look at me you can only see



a man surely inebriated, 



making gestures with that stick he carries.



Must be the stick which walks me in circles. 



No matter what, I list to the right,



unknowingly going in strange driveways,



rather than proceeding in a straight path.




 


Today I found myself back where I started.



Sacre bleu, how did I manage that? 



When I open my eyes, I am surprised.



Sometimes don’t recognize the place I am,



and thus, perplexed in finding my way back



to wherever I happened to come from.




 


All this in hope of deserving a dog, 



by proving I don’t need one to find my way. 



Through mobility cramming I will learn how.



With laughs, groans, perseverance and mishaps 



I will win, though it takes me the next two years. 



That seems to me, I reckon, just about right. 




 



 


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