[Critique Group 2] Emailing: 11-21-19 Group 2-critique session

[James]

11-21-19 Group 2-critique session 

1. Joan's piece:

The title is perfect. The poem has a sense of motion. I too feel a pang of
sadness as the seasons grow colder and less alive. This is a well executed
and effective piece. I especially like the lines below:
"That nimbus straining toward you. Salient
Edge, severing. Keen as Harry's hoe,

Put away three years ago when harvested
Vegetables lost their particular

Flavors." 
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2. Valerie's piece:

Well, I share the sentiment. I frequently find the holidays disturbing with
all the unnecessary spending and acquisition. I think we are sending a
message to our young people (as was done with us) that" stuff" is what it is
all about. Anyway the piece gets the point across that not everyone is gah
gah over the holidays. Just 2 words that must be artifacts of Net by Phone:
"expectec" obviously expected and "adeqate" instead of adequate. 
Short and effective as is Val's trademark.
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3. Alice's piece:

A truly effective and appealing twist at the end. The character of the
Christmas Poet is an interesting and atypical one. This piece works for me
as it isn't overly sentimental. As stated earlier, I am not a devotee of the
holidays other than Thanksgiving but this story held my interest. It does
make one wonder what occurs on 12/23. 
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4. Leonard's piece:

Leonard first submitted this piece for the 11/17/19 B.O.E critique session.
I was fascinated by the parallel between the child's unworldliness and the
ignorance of many adults when they encounter people with disabilities. I
sent Leonard the below:
In these large critique sessions, a vast amount of feedback and even
interpretation is voiced. Perhaps too much! I read your piece several times
and concluded (rightly or wrongly) that you were drawing a parallel between
childhood unworldliness and adult ignorance. As you know, in the disability
community the first principle is: "I am a person just like you and I happen
to have a disability. All that really means is that I have to do many things
differently than you do them." If I have your history correct, at that young
age you had no awareness of your own disabling condition. You saw the
disability and it over shadowed the person. Unfortunately, many adults have
the same reaction toward all people with a disability. Some sort of uneasy
mixture of fear and pity. I don't doubt you have experienced a similar
reaction on the part of ignorant adults. I certainly have. Was that the
point? We may all start off ignorant but we can learn. And the potential
damage that can be inculcated in a person with a disability in terms of self
esteem and isolation are the seeds of such an uninformed perception or
belief.  Have I got it right? 
Leonard provided a comprehensive and thoughtful reply. 
  
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