[Critique Group 2] group2 pieces due Thursday

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

Hi Group2,
Just a reminder that our pieces are due Thursday. Mine is attatched and also pasted below. For some reason there may be lots of spaces between the lines. I don't know how to fix it, so try to ignore it. The attached version is probably fine.

Leonard

Lines: 52 including all the spaces and title.


 


Unfinished Business Never Finished




 


Married sixteen years, more or less --

too young to be hung by marriage bonds --

too immature to parent children,

to build a solid house on shifting sands.

We had three children, and I made four --

sometimes great for playing around,

when the other kids wanted a game.

She didn’t need child number four.

She strove to cope the best she could.


 


In midlife crisis, I left the nest --

abandoned it to tangled tatters,

our fledglings not yet able to fly.


 


She grew up much before I did,

a misfortune of fate for her,

required to carry the burden

As the single sensible parent --

forceful when they needed her to be,

wise when she had no other choice.


 


This woman did an heroic job.

All her children thrived and flourished,

bearing the scars I inflicted,

yet gleaming with love and understanding.


 


She died yesterday.


 


I couldn’t intrude into her 

sacred remaining moments,

surrounded by our children.


 


OUR CHILDREN


 


who held her hand,

played her music,

talked to her in her silence, 

eased her way through the doorway.


 


Last night at two in the morning 

my skin grew exceedingly hot.

I thrashed about, unable to sleep,

as she broke the ties from her life.


 


When is a relationship over?

When is business finished?

All the words spoken?

All the tears shed?


 


Maybe never.


 


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