[Critique Group 2] correction : sent wrong submission

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

Hi again Group2,

Thank you Alice for pointing out that I did not send the right piece for my submission. You were right, in that it was the assignment for next week for my Writing for Healing and Growth Group at the Senior Center.

Below is what I meant to send.

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Ode to Flaw 


 


Gyroscope spins in perfect balance 

on a flawless flat level,

in an impeccable universe.


 


Anger, understanding, fear and faith 

love, hate, passion and tranquility,

all competitions held in balance,

form the celestial spinning wheel.


 


Moves in stillness without notice.

The dweller lives in consummate peace,

Stability needs no direction,

a world replete within itself.


 


One element slips out of balance.

Whirligig slides down slippery slope,

following its new imperfection.

Internal dweller pays attention,

no more in eternal simple bliss,

discomforted by imperfection,

and now able to fall in love.


 


A flawed path is a learning path.

A living river may twist and twine,

but never runs in pristine circles.


 

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