[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Carnival Fugue--For 4-25-19 critique session.

[James]

Carnival Fugue
C by Brad Corallo
Word count 215

Sauntering, shuffling, unhurried along a beach.
Step into an orange sunset.

A pattern of sparkling multicolored lights appears.
Artfully strung across the purplish, descending twilight.

Approaching more closely, carnival sounds swell
framed by the ever changing rumbling of the surf. 

You are drawn into the emerging scene.
As colors explode into kaleidoscopic ringlets.

Softly she calls your name.
Her cascading hair shimmers through a hundred different hues.

Somehow it is all familiar and comfortable.
You know that voice.

Magenta flashes between spokes of the turning Ferris wheel.
Firework stars gently dust the sky.
You feel the sounds of the calliope.
You are seduced by delicious smells.

You stand entranced as the world seems to tilt.
Spinning dizzily, images shatter.

Seconds later, the world seems to right itself.
You breathe deeply and open your eyes.

The sun has fallen below the horizon.
All that remains is a narrow band of twilight, darkening!

You wonder what just happened.
Was any of it real?

You ask you're self.
Am I blessed or am I mad?

There is no answer.
All that remains is the ever changing music of the sea.

And perhaps, far, far away
a voice, more sensed than heard-
 softly calls your name. 

*/Special thanks to Donovan, Focus and Love/*

jamesstarfire at gmail.com





  
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