[Critique Group 2] clarification re. my submission

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

Hi group 1,

Abbie informed me that I had already submitted something for September. I decided to choose Legacy as my submission. Just in case there is still confusion, I've pasted my submission below.

Leonard
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Legacy

 

I am a space time wanderer,

looking for a place to dwell --

a land of prairie grasses --

verdant, shadowed woodlands --

rushing, tumbling crystal streams

flowing to ponds and lakes,

abounding with fish and fowl, 

living oceans vast as skies,

that twinkle with firmament 

in dark of sacred nights,

and rains to wash all anew.

 

“Go, my son,” my father said.

“Travel where my time is done,

and take this land in times to come.

The future belongs to you alone.”

 

In gratitude and expectation,

I mounted my waiting flying steed,

who carried me through passing years,

swiftly on his timeless wings;

so quickly I could not perceive

the landscapes changing under me.

 

When the sweeping Sun and stars

cease their pinwheel streaking swirl,

I look down upon a wasted world,

where forests once stood, a burned-out grit

festooned with stunted plants and bugs --

prairies silent of beating hooves --

deserts sweltering in heat of night --

wormed-out mountains of barren rock --

streams and lakes, long now, oily dead --

oceans reek with the smell of death,

in embrace of a torrid wind.

 

I scream out to the sickened land,

“What, in God’s name, has happened to you?”

 

And Earth answers in gasping breath,

“Your father took faster than I could give.”
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