[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Ode to the Goddess Guanyin--For 9-27-18 critique session.

[James]

Hello fellow critiquers,
I took to heart the excessive number of "ands" in my Avalon    piece and
only have one in this piece which alas also is in rhyme. Please allow me my
one "and" as I believe it is the best word in the place it appears. After
the 2nd hospitalization ordeal, I was encouraged to write about it by a wise
and dear presence in my life. It even seems strange to me, that the below is
what resulted.
BC
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Ode to the Goddess Guanyin 
C By Brad Corallo
Word count 334

 NOTE: As through my life I have pursued my interest in the world's
mythologies, the Goddess Guanyin has always been my favorite deity in Asian
legend. There are many stories of her exploits from many Asian societies and
different Buddhist traditions. Having just gone through a vast amount of
pain and dehumanizing violation (most of it unavoidable) I began to remember
my lifelong fascination with her. Indeed it is even possible (though not
likely) that aspects of Guanyin crossed my path recently in the persons of a
nurse, Gina and a nursing assistant, Arleen.

 I highly recommend reading about her many actions to right all wrongs and
help all beings to know true release from the Karmic wheel. It occurs to me
that possibly a version of her appears in my recent poem: "A Dream of
Respite" which was written 3 days before the beginning of the above
mentioned ordeal. Wikipedia is a decent place to begin your introduction. It
is my genuine hope that the many tales of her boundless compassion provide
you with comfort or even true inspiration to benevolent action. 

***

Over all creation in dynamic motion,
presides Guanyin of the Southern Ocean. 

The one true Goddess of compassion.
the pain of others is her ration.

Oh, how I long to be your Sudhana
to heal the world with sacred Manna. 

Through your myriad eyes and hands,
no evils would before us stand. 

But alas, our paths are widely scattered
yet hope continues though hearts be shattered.

I was told to seek you on Fragrant Mountain
 to bathe in the mist of your soothing fountain. 

So this search has been my work of being
all performed without true seeing. 

Thus all my time to quest and seek
to find you on Fragrant Mountain Peak.

Upon that day all suffering will end 
as your compassion, every heart shall mend.  
  
Then every soul will have release
and the universe may at last know peace. 

jamesstarfire at gmail.com
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