[Critique Group 2] Emailing: The Pace Of Freedom--For 10-25-18 critique session.

[James]

Hey There Friends of Group 2:

Hot off the presses, a new piece. I must say this is a relief as my last
poem, 20 days ago,  was about how not writing can feel. Now I know Abbie
will be horrified by all the "ing" usage. I however strongly believe that
such is necessary to add to the feeling of action and rapid motion that I am
trying to capture in this piece. I have been working in human services for
34 years and I can tell you that the pace in the work place today is far
faster than it was 15 years ago. Of course, one reason is the funding cuts
made by those benevolent leaders at "the pinnacle of Social Darwinism." 
BC
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The Pace Of Freedom
C By Brad Corallo 
Word count 233

It is easy to get caught up in the repeating loop of living.
As we move faster multitasking to get more things done,
distinct points begin to blur.
Oh right, today is Thursday.
One can continue the cycle for a long time
before even becoming consciously aware.
For some, this is the signal to temporarily exit the merry go round whorl
and consciously choose to slow down.
For a brief time.

But all to soon,
we again tightly ratchet up the accomplishment machinery 
and spin back into the roller coaster loop of living. 
Sleeping, eating, working, eating again, relaxing briefly and sleeping once
again! 
To do it all over, until 
the blessed weekend!

Thank God, it's the weekend!
Sleep late, errands and chores to do
supplemented with fun and socialization.
Maybe even relaxation, because
all too soon it is back on the wheel
dashing like crazed rodents once again!
Working, earning, paying taxes!

The ruling elite watch and smile.
For such is not their lot in life.
Just keep them running in their never ending spirals 
and their lot in life will never become ours!
We are the pinnacle of Social Darwinism!

As they sit in their mirrored counting houses,
puffing on huge cigars,
they declaim:
"They are so fortunate,
out of the kindness and wisdom of our enlightened leadership,
we have given them freedom!"

jamesstarfire at gmail.com

  
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