[Critique Group 2] My Submission for February 27th Pasted and Attached

[Abbie Taylor]

Next month, I'll be in Florida with my brother and his family, and one of the things we'll be doing is celebrating my nephew's 20th birthday. I wrote the following pome for him, using a prompt given in my last Third Thursday Poets meeting which is to write a  poem using numbers.

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TO MY NEPHEW AT TWENTY

It seems like yesterday when you were born. 
Named after Bob Dylan and Dylan Thomas, 
you were Grandma Gummy’s little dilly bar.
When you were a baby,
I held and sang to you, made faces,
said “fuzzy pickle” when your daddy took our picture.

Then you were two. 
Grandpa Grumpy’s truck fascinated you. 
Being told no did not. 
At four, you played soccer, 
wanted to be big.
Now you are—how time has flown.

The possibilities are endless. 
With your own band, 
you could produce a record label, 
write and record hundreds of songs, 
give thousands of performances across the country, 
or you could be a teacher like your father
or a writer like me,
inspire and entertain millions.

Abbie Johnson Taylor, Author http://abbiescorner.wordpress.com
http://www.abbiejohnsontaylor.com
abbie at mysero.net
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