[Critique Group 2] My Poem for 9-26-2017

[Abbie Taylor]

I'm not exactly sure what inspired this poem. The idea jumped into my 
head several years ago while reading the last of Frank McCourt's 
memoirs, about his teaching experiences in a New York City high school. 
This poem could have been a story of one of his students, but I can't 
say for sure.

I would like to submit it for possible publication in our state poetry 
society's chapbook. The theme is yearning or longing. Does this poem 
fit? If not, what can I do to emphasize the longing?

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VEAL AND TELEMANDE

Alone at a mahogany dining room table,

the teen-ager eats veal medallions in wine sauce,

mashed potatoes, asparagus, salad,

a meal his father always enjoyed.

He listens to music by Telemande,

one of his father’s favorite composers.

Later, he will visit his father,

in a hospital dying of cancer,

the boy’s mother at his bedside.

-- 
Abbie Johnson Taylor, Author http://abbiescorner.wordpress.com
http://www.abbiejohnsontaylor.com
abbie at mysero.net
Order my new memoir at http://www.abbiejohnsontaylor.com/memoir.htm

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