[Critique Group 2] Emailing: Restoration--for 10-31-17 critique session.

[James]

Hey there Group 2, 

I posted this to the list about two months ago and got positive though
minimal feedback. When I wrote it and even now, it seems to be something
that I have been trying to write for years. It is an important piece to me!
Consequently I would appreciate the wisdom and observations of the best
critique group of B.O.E to illuminate it. It is also interesting for its
brevity as it is the second shortest thing I have ever written other than
shopping lists.
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Restoration
C By Brad Corallo
Word count 78

In a far away place
in a moment beyond time.
We will finally meet
under a gently glowing golden sky.
Together we will stand, facing.
We will gaze deeply into each other's eyes
and we will know one another
even more fully than we do now.
We will smile
and take each other's hands. 
A long forgotten ancient cord shall ring.
And at last, all will be 
as it always should have been.

jamesstarfire at gmail.com
  
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