[Critique Group 2] concerns about formatting being distorted through emailing

[James]

 Hello Group 2,

 

I noticed that in the email sent by Abbie, the line breaks in my piece were
not correctly presented. Consequently I looked at the e-mail I sent to Group
2 on 10-14-16 and the version pasted inside the email had the same problem.
This is rather disturbing. I would suggest for all who can to view the
attachment as it seems to have preserved the correct formatting. I am not
sure who can view attachments but the pasted version is not what I chose to
submit for critique. Consequently I am resending the attachment. The piece
begins:

With water diamonds sparkling in her eyes

fell Guardian of Morning, through twilight autumn skies.

There is then a line break and two more lines. Then another line break and a
six line verse followed by a line break.

I would appreciate feedback if you received the piece as I just described
the beginning structure.

Brad

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