[Critique Group 2] early submission for meeting on 25 at 7:30p

[Tuchyner5 at aol.com]

Hi critique  gang, 
I'm following Val's  example and getting out my submission  very early. The 
submissions aren't  due until one week before our meeting date. One thing I 
would like to get from  your critiques of this piece is whether I got my 
intended message across.   Actually, that is not an essential quality for a 
poem, as long as it speaks in  some way to a number of readers, in my opinion. 
But I am interested in what  you get out of this poem, if anything. 
Otherwise, just do your critique thins.  They are all good stuff.  
Leonard 
Just Do  It 
Once a zygote came to be, 
formed by two specks of he and she, 
motes of motion and desire. 
Do these add up to an intention? 
Is it all explained by devotion? 
Yang will always seek to find. 
Yin will always seek to be found. 
Yang lives for that new union. 
Yin reaches out patiently, 
awaiting sparks of new conceptions, 
in seas of possibilities. 
Great mother has countless faces, 
all shrouded in varied veils, 
from black opaque of stygian night  
to alluring lucid water light,  
whose eyes reveal a sky of eyes. 
all peeking behind their mantles, 
beguiling discovery. 
One zygote made an Albert Einstein, 
another Adolph Hitler. 
One gave birth to quantum mechanics, 
the other to a Holocaust, 
both driven by their passion visions, 
mileposts on creation’s roads, 
Pandora’s box already unlatched, 
its substance never fully voided. 
Still we’ll reap its unknown gifts. 
Yet I’ll follow creation’s way. 
It is passion, love and devotion  
that fills my willing, stalwart sails. 
Though I may never know in full 
wherein will be my destiny, 
I’ll always have a star to  follow.
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