[Critique Group 2] submission for November 29

[Alice Massa]

NOTE:Since the literary term "enjambment" came up at our previous 
critique session (as a result of my prior submission), I decided to 
bring the following twenty-seven-line poem out of hiding in my 
archives.The poem is a product of the first part of exercise 13 of 
Lesson 6 of the Hadley Institute for the Blind course "Elements of 
Poetry."Thus, I attempt below a one-sentence poem incorporating 
enjambment. Although I wrote this one-sentence poem on April 9, 2012, 
the one-stanza poem mentions my father's cerebral hemorrhage which 
occurred on November 16, 1997 (two weeks before his passing on December 1).

*Biography of a House in the Heartland*

by Alice Jane-Marie Massa

In a locket

in my heart,

I keep and remember this

precious place

with clumps of lilies-of-the-valley clinging

to her east side like pretty paint on toenails while

the perennial porch swing, successful hummingbird feeder, and wrought iron

bedeck the large front porch from where

three points of the compass can offer a view of

the lawn, west of the white-rocked driveway, sinking

(due to the abandoned underground coal shaft filling with water), along 
with

the field of Christmas trees, the wheat fields and corn fields and some 
cattle

to the north until the east span is revealed

between the blue spruce and the gob pile of shale

atop which is unveiled the southern vista of

the field that rolls back to the small woods from where

one can easily walk to the back door of the house

built by my grandfather in 1914

(the year his youngest, my mother, was born)

and lived in by my parents from after

my dad’s four and a half years in World War II until his death at age 84 
when

my mother walked circles in the snow until a neighbor came to help at 
this house

where a cerebral hemorrhage took away all

but the memories

and the heart

of a house

in the Hoosier heartland.


  (I will also attach this poem.)


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