[Critique Group 2] submission for Group 2 critique

[Alice Massa]

Greetings to Group 2 participants!


     Among your other comments, I hope you will consider including your 
thoughts about this poem's being able to stand alone (or not).  I am not 
including the short essay which originally accompanied this poem for my 
blog post.  The poem is 35 lines and awaits your critique for our July 
26 critique session.


     For those who prefer, I will include an attachment of the poem, 
along with the poem pasted below.


With thanks,

Alice Massa

ajm321kh at wi.rr.com

July 18, 2016, Monday


*Velvet Nights of Summer with Leader Dog Willow*

by Alice Jane-Marie Massa

Oh, the velvet nights of summer!

I happily embrace

nights when the velvet air of July

cushions my face

from the memories of the past winter,

nights when the velvet clouds

pad the poetic path

on which I walk and write,

nights when velvet winds

stretch from the succumbing sun to the dusk

which unfolds into a natural desk

on which I can creatively write

as my guide dog Willow leads the way.

On this velvet evening,

a double block drifts into a "Writer's Block,"

then a span of back to total concentration on work with Willow.

At the next double block,

along Juneau,

I hear the mourning dove--

also for the first time

since returning home

with my new Leader Dog.

On the day after the anniversary of my Dad's 103rd birthday,

is he nodding his approval

of my /Wordwalks/ with Willow,

of my Willow?

My fourth Leader Dog and I walk

toward the distant cooing

of the uncommon mourning dove--

more typical in the trees around my Hoosier home.

What a gift is this velvet night

on the 12th of July,

whenI come to the crossroads

where the mourning dove, my writing, and my willow

meet!

July 13, 2016, Wednesday


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