[Critique Group 2] piece for critique on 7/26/16Emailing: Summer, Mount Sinai Harbor

[James]

Summer, Mount Sinai Harbor
C by Brad Corallo 
Word count: 189 

scent of hot asphalt
caressing Gentle breeze 

happy schreeks of playing children
joyous barking, bounding canines

basket balls beat pavement rhythms
rim shots, backboard booms!

fiery cratered rocky sand
treacherous to barefoot souls

dock tackle, Intermittent clanking 
revving boat motors, spew their fowl exhaust

long gliding sound of fishing line
flashing through metallic eyes

the plop as led hits water
ratcheting sounds, eager cranking

car engine noise
approaching and moving away

ten second peal of music
rises and fades

"Summer breeze, makes me feel fine
blowing through the Jasmine in my mind!" 

poignant pang of memory
long forgotten face of smiling girl

white foam strokes the shore
light reflects off undulating water

clear blue sky, white puffy clouds
warm bright breath of Earth's star bathing all

perfumed skin, bronzed sun worshipers 
transient whiffs, pineapple coconut

ball games blaring from radios
parking lot Ice cream truck circles, piping familiar melodies 

spreading my Op Art towel, I lay down
 finely Warm all over, so totally here, gratitude, ascending! 


NOTE: Quoted lines adapted from "Summer Breeze" by Seals and Crofts


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