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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Sally,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>May 13<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Thank you, the poem brought tears to my eyes, since this is the path I am currently walking. Your gentle touch handled the gradual diminishing of a loved one’s nature with increasing disability. The last stanza brought comfort to my sadness. I too promised and am doing my best to honor that promise.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Any Change Means Disaster<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>At the end of the second stanza, there needs to be a question mark after the word (befall.)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>In the last stanza, there is a space between the word (effect) and the period at the end of the sentence.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I am not sure of any revisions or suggestions other than some of the lines scan as awkward, but the lines workout.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal> <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Passing it forwad?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>This is a good second chapter to your first story about the mugger assaulting the blind girl in the park. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>There are some punctuation and unnecessary words, but I know Marcia will do a better job of spotting them than I could. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>You misspelled through spelling it (thru).<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>You have a wrong word, (sense) which should be (since), before she couldn’t return it,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Are you going to write more of these? I ask because in the first one I didn’t think the mugger was old. Maybe I am not remembering the details clearly though. I mentioned your story to my husband and he thought the idea was clever. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sweet and appropriate for your school’s newsletter. I can find nothing I would change or suggest. Your writing is concise, contains a touch of humor and flows well.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal> <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>DeAnna Quietwater Noriega<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>Cell: 573-544-3511<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>Email: <a href="mailto:dqnoriega@gmail.com"><span style='color:#0563C1'>dqnoriega@gmail.com</span></a><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>Author of <i>Fifty Years of Walking with Friends<o:p></o:p></i></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><i><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/</span></i><span style='mso-ligatures:none'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>