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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally’s May comments:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia: The phrase beginning “But what does a retired” is not a complete sentence. Suggestion: incorporate it into the first sentence with a comma or drop the “But” and make a sentence such as What does a retired guide dog do, though? You need an extra space between the word “career.” And the beginning of the next sentence. In the phrase “yellow lab”, the lower-case lab should be a capital L. Most of the errors would have been picked up by spellcheck. The sentence beginning :Although not a certified therapy dog” needs to be re-written. As it stands, the subject “I” is modified by the beginning phrase, and I know you are not a therapy dog. I LOVE the name Bowser! If GDB has a newsletter for puppy raisers or students, this piece would be an excellent submission.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna: I am still laughing about “Flush, Mommy, flush” and the trash compacter incident. Good essay, but it ends somewhat abruptly.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard: An apt title! I am not certain of the meaning of the line beginning “Markedly.” “enormous outlandish price”: pick one of the adjectives since they are so similar. “Entirely necessary”: drop “entirely” since something is either necessary or isn’t. Is “order” the right word? I know what you mean, but would a sighted reader understand the implication and what “JAWS” is? The poem is one every computer user can relate to; computers have a mind of their own.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>Cleora: This is really creepy which is, I hope, what you intended it to be. Could you add it to the earlier story about the card and then continue with the next few people who get stuck with it? I think that would make a good book. I can’t come up with a title, either, but I am sure one will come to mind. This story is a little long and could benefit from tightening up and shortening the longer sentences.<o:p></o:p></span></p></div></body></html>