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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Tiny Acrobats<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Punctuation: needs a period.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Choose my house as their tree.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Or<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>tiny acrobats <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>a satellite tree in mind<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>choose my house as their tree<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>or<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Small acrobat ants<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Seeking a satellite tree<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Choose my house as home.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Deanna<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Writing Wisdom<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Worthwhile musings, very polished<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Avoid “it”: I usually decide that it is to make the world a little better place for having been born in to it.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: I usually decide that my purpose is to make the world a little better place for having been born into it.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Good line: There are more activities with which to fill my hours than there are minutes in them.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Singular?: which directions<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: which direction<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Switched from first person: If you look around and explore your options, one need never feel bored or unconnected to the greater scheme of things. There you have it. My blueprint for living your best life. What is more, exper<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: If I look around and explore my options, I need never feel bored or unconnected to the greater scheme of things. There you have it—a blueprint for living my best life. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Mixed Signs<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Title suggestion: Mixed Signals<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>Use comma: Nights are raw and days still chilly. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>Try: Nights are raw and days still chilly,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Plural: <span style='color:black'>normally seen as harbinger of Spring. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Try: <span style='color:black'>normally seen as harbingers of Spring. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Verb tense: <span style='color:black'>boning up on calcium for their ovum,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Try: <span style='color:black'>bone up on calcium for their ovum,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Comma?: <span style='color:black'>They say not so fast.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Try: They say, not so fast.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Nice comparison: <span style='color:black'>like the geese, I know not which way it goes. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Which way to go?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Restoration<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: Waking, I shuffle toward the kitchen,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Awake, I shuffle toward the kitchen,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Good job capturing your thoughts in clean uncluttered way<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>