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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Two minor typos: mid-Air, (the word air doesn’t need a capital letter.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Matched stride should be strides since you are talking about to people.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I liked the pacing of this chapter. The two young women exhibit their differences again. Veronica is confident everything will fall-out as she wishes, while Claudia isn’t sure at all.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>This chapter works.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I think the title would be better as <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Mixed Signals<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Bray makes me think of donkeys or mules, not geese, I think of their sound as honks or cries.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>You have three uses of way close together. You might change the middle one and say:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Can’t decide a direction to fly.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I think you have a typo in the title, did you mean restoration?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Lovely poem of dreaming and resting, hibernation until spring. Lovely lyrical.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I thought both your first and then second haiku were good but you don’t mention what the nature element they describe is in words. I thought the first one might be ants but the second one might be a flock of finches. I like your explanation of the Acrobat Ants and think Charles Portolano might like a brief paragraph about your inspiration.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>DeAnna Quietwater Noriega<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>Cell: 573-544-3511<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>Email: <a href="mailto:dqnoriega@gmail.com"><span style='color:#0563C1'>dqnoriega@gmail.com</span></a><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>Author of <i>Fifty Years of Walking with Friends<o:p></o:p></i></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><i><span style='mso-ligatures:none'>https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/</span></i><span style='mso-ligatures:none'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>