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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I liked the ending scene between Ginger and Misty. I think there is too abrupt a move from the girls getting ready for bed and waking up with a full blown plan. It reads like an outline unless you fill-in a bit of how the family come to agree on the plans the sisters have presented, rather than a logical progression.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>“repair n organ” The letter n should be the word an. I feel your sense of disconnection and lonliness in facing serious health issues pretty much alone, except for your cat. The friends you care for are far away. It isn’t morbid, just honest and real.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>The phrase, ‘to enhance mutual awareness” doesn’t really work. I think what you meant was more like “to achieve true communication.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>You used gentle twice in your last two lines. Perhaps try a loving touch?<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>One typo when you wrote “the call was costing me six dollars a minutes,” doesn’t need the letter S. I am not sure this chapter advances your story much except to show why Veronica seems so self-centered. It would appear she had to be that way, given her upbringing. Children adapt to survive their environment.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna Quietwater Noriega<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cell: 573-544-3511<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Email: <a href="mailto:dqnoriega@gmail.com"><span style='color:#0563C1'>dqnoriega@gmail.com</span></a><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Author of <i>Fifty Years of Walking with Friends<o:p></o:p></i></p><p class=MsoNormal><i>https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/</i><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>