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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>I got my COVID second booster on Monday afternoon and feel as though I have been run over by a truck. I plan to be on the call tonight but am not sure how long I can stay on. So, I am sending my comments early. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>May comments from Sally:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna: I love the harmony and respect of this poem. Should “first nation” be capitalized? Should the names of specific animal species be capitalized in the context of this poem? You need a comma before and after “too.” There should be a comma after “furred and feathered relatives” “Each one” is singular, so the “are” following it should be “is.”<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard: This is truer than I wish it were. Your choice of words is spot on. I love how “saunters” with its leisurely meaning is the polar opposite of what you hear. Good use of onomatopia. I didn’t know about the songbirds, but it is an excellent way to end the poem.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora: I like this story more and more with each chapter. I was surprised that the nurse told Mrs. Carper that Gary was in the home; this violated patient confidentialty. I also wonder if there are some paragraphs missing since it is a long jump from the home’s reception desk scene to the three people having Christmas dinner. There should be a few in-between scenes of the grandmother and Gary meeting and what they discussed. Legally, I don’t think the husband could have forced his wife to admit a minor to the home. Somewhere in the searching for a placement and having Gary admitted, social services would have become involved and called in protective services.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia This is terrific. The dialogue flows and moves the story along. The use of Chickie and Rooster as small-town names is perfect. Very funny and makes the reader want to turn page after page. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>