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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Entitled<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>The first line is an incomplete sentence. Try, the word) entitled,) means believing oneself to be inherently deserving of privileges or special treatment.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Who is they? It appears that politicians are promising us those politicians are promising someone that they are free to do something to our youth. It isn’t clear who that is.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>(You are entitled to someone else to pick up the tab for your choice. This whole sentence is confusing. Perhaps you should put a period after deadly virus. If you left the but out and ended the next phrase (and after as a result of your decision. The next part is also confusing. There seems to be too many repetitions of the word, to here. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Leonard<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Sand Dune Marchers<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Nestled in a nest doesn’t feel as if it flows well. Perhaps cradled?<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>The last line needs a question mark.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I would suggest The Pilgrims as a title.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I like the use of language.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>New Year Resolve<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>A good chapter further developing the isolation of the main character and the hostility of the town to outsiders. Also, the reluctance of Veronica to engage with the locals makes her appear a bit of a judgmental and sarcastic person who makes no effort to engage the people of the town. Claudia has put her foot in it, but doesn’t know how to undo the bad impression she left. Still, it does appear that the town is being judgmental of the two young women too. Why should Pete think that two well educated attractive young women would be interested in a person who waits tables and works two jobs. He doesn’t make any effort to be friendly or engaging himself. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna Quietwater Noriega<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cell: 573-544-3511<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Email: <a href="mailto:dqnoriega@gmail.com"><span style='color:#0563C1'>dqnoriega@gmail.com</span></a><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Author of <i>Fifty Years of Walking with Friends<o:p></o:p></i></p><p class=MsoNormal><i>https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/</i><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>