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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Critique for August 2021<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Sally<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>You are missing a space between the words: explained and they. You also need a space between the words (swaying to) and the title “All the Way to the River”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I loved the image of your parents dancing. When Curtis and I were on our 25<sup>th</sup> anniversary cruise, there was an older couple that had met during the war who performed a lively jitterbug for us. Dancing doesn’t really require grace or talent. It can be purely for the enjoyment of the dancer. One of my coworkers dances in her power wheelchair every chance she gets. Moving to music is in everyone who has a sense of rhythm. I bet it was your mother who talked your dad into taking the lessons. She already knew how to dance.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Leonard<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Accidents<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Needs a better title.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>(When you think you see, but you don’t)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal> <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Blithely riding through the ample breach, discover ed (unnecessary space, should read discovered)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>This essay seems truncated.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>There should be some kind of conclusion.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Cleora<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>In the sentence: One of these has been my frustration with the ability of the typical care giver. I think you mean the “lack”<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal> of ability to perform their duties shown by the typical care giver.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I believe I have figured out what the <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>’ that popped up in last month’s article is supposed to be. When I replaced these letters and symbols with an apostrophe, the words made sense in the context where they appear. I’m became I’m, doesn’t became doesn’t and hasn’t becomes hasn’t.<span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Black Balled<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Well written. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Good use of descriptive language. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>You are moving the story along well. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>No suggestions or changes.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna Quietwater Noriega<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cell: 573-544-3511<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Email: <a href="mailto:dqnoriega@gmail.com"><span style='color:#0563C1'>dqnoriega@gmail.com</span></a><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Author of <i>Fifty Years of Walking with Friends<o:p></o:p></i></p><p class=MsoNormal><i>https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/</i><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>