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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally’s June comments:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia: I love this piece and can relate. A few things: When you go back to look for your cat and guide dog, you mention finding your cat but make no mention of your guide dog, and you leave without any reunion. Is the small dog meant to be your guide? You are looking for food for your cat but don’t mention finding any; however, when you leave her to follow your father, the cat has food. I think the description of what you can see upon awakening is very effective.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora: What I like about this piece is that it shows your passion for the subject and how much you want to communicate that passion to the reader. However, I have a few suggestions: I think the piece needs to be tightened and cropped to make a piece on just the internet banking aspect. The rest of the material has many topics for future writings. I would also mention early on that you are blind and rely on technology that works from home to simplify your life and be independent. Remember that I know that, but your audience doesn’t. I think that emphaszising this fact would clarify your theme.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard: I love this poem and how it shows your personal grief with the implication of how we all grieve our dogs. You mention that Eric came out of nowhere and, in the end, disappeared. Does this have any spiritual significance? Is the title really appropriate since you will always miss him?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna: Have we met Stacey before? She reminds me a bit of Lisa. I like the ways you show but don’t tell Stacey’s care for detail and kindness.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>