[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on Sally's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

This is beautiful. 

The rhythm is great.   

Succinct use of language. 

Some alliteration.  

Uplifting message.

A whole new world of mobility beforeyou.

Sally sub for April 23

          

 

                                                         GRETA

 

Arriving on a summer day,

with wagging tail and self-possession

born of charm and golden beauty,

she walked into my home and heart

and, with alacrity and joy,

guided me, hand on harness,

into a world of possibilities.                                                  By Sally Rosenthal

 




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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