[Critique Group 1] Leonard's comments on Sally's sub

[Leonard Tuchyner]

A wonderful poem of hope for theworld’s homeless and hungry. 

This is seen from the point of viewof a sentient creature 

who we would not ordinarilyattribute such heavenly thoughts. 

Yet, the author paints a picturewhich the reader sees with ease.   

Therhyming  scheme is very, bery good 

Ithink this writer has a future.

 

 

Sally sub for Dec 22

 

 

The night before Christmas,

all through the flat,

no one was moving

except for the cat.

 

Her whiskers aquiver,

she sat on the sill

and gazed through the window

at valley and hill.

 

The night was a cold one

all covered in frost,

and she thought of the creatures

forgotten and lost.

 

So sad for the beings

cold in the snow,

the hungry and homeless

with nowhere to go.

 

She prayed for their comfort

to heaven above

and hoped the bright star

would lead them to love.




 
 
Leonard I. Tuchyner, Author
 
https://www.dldbooks.com/tuchyner/

 
  
 
 

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