[Critique Group 1] Leonard's belated comments on Sally's submission

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

Sally’spiece for Feb
 



This is abeautiful piece of nostalgia. 



Even thoughI don’t get the full meaning of aerogram, 



I still getthe meaning of the poem very well. 



I assume anaerogram is a letter from overseas. 



It musthave been blue. 



But howthat is related to a ribbon is a mystery.  



The specialbond the aerograms forged between your young self and grandmother is clear. 



It has nointerest to most eyes. 



They onlyspeak of family news. 



Pherhapsthe messages they sent had no value, except to the two people who shared them.But that is more than enough. 



Aren’t youglad you kept them for over the years.  



The lovecomes out very clear.  



And, asusual, the reader is with you every second. 



Yourdescriptions are some of the best I have ever read. 



 



Brittlewith age, the British aerogram’s



Cornercrumbles in my hand.



One of manylovingly saved



Inagranddaughter’s once-pink hair ribbon




 


I don’t getthe above line. 



What is theaerogram being saved in?




 


For morethan six decades, it is



A bittersweet attempt tobear witness



And turnthin sheets of paper



Intocrinkled forget-me-nots.




 


What isbeing saved,  the aerogram or pinkribbon.




 


 



As a child,I believed



aerogramswere blue to match



the oceanthey traversed



I’m afraidI don’t know what an aerogram is. Are they blue in color?




 


>From anelderly lady in Leicestershire



To aschoolgirl in Pennsylvania.



 



I know thespidery handwriting



Relatesonly family news



Andinquires about my school days,



Brownietroop, and beloved dogs.



Missives oflove from one brittle with age,



Of nointerest to intrusive eyes after my death,



Theaerograms and bond they forged



Can remaintucked away for now.



The ink hasno doubt faded over time,



but thememories In the heart of the granddaughter,



Herself nowbrittle with age,



Remainfresh with just a hint of ocean breeze.



 




 


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