[Critique Group 1] Cleora's november notes (12/1/21)

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 comments for Leonard
 Now, after listening to the other comments, I think I get it a little.
I can see a kind of marching maybe with the grass waving back and forth in the wind.
I get the parallel  to the sand now, if the blades are bending over in the wind.
However, they are not moving. Not really.
So, nice imagery. But, I'm not a poet, so I doubt I would ever truly appreciate it.
Comments for DeAnna
the familiar wolf is back that appears in so many of your pieces.
I see this as a piece about the toxic earth and global warming 
This is a poem about Mother Earth.
I think this would be an excellent ever green poem for Portolano
comments for Marsha
Continues to have good unique character development.
I quickly get to know these characters.
First part is very tight, but after they leave the restaurant, it could use some tightening.
Sally took it that she snooped in the room on her way to the bathroom.
I thought I saw the word glanced in implying a quick look on her way by.
I could accept snooping on Claudia's part if that is what is meant.