[Critique Group 1] Sally's March comments

[Sally Rosenthal]

Sally's March comments:

Cleora:  This is funny, imaginative, and has a great ending.  I wasn't sure
about the formatting, but each new quote by a speaker should be the
beginning of a paragraph.  My screenreader just reads it continuously even
when I go down line by line.  Is this story meant to stand alone, or is it
part of a collection of fantasy or science fiction?  I like the way you
combine the everyday life we know with the sci-fi elements.

Leonard:  This is lovely.  It is a new plant to me.  I especially like the
imagery of your taking two plants with you when you move to ease you into
winter.  Those words alone make the poem universal and, at the same time,
personal.  Well done!

DeAnna: Another excellent and original piece.  This one is a bit longer than
your other Grandmother Spider stories.  Is that OK?  I especially liked the
conversation between the dog and the wolf.         

 

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