[Critique Group 1] Cleora's submission for October session

[sitting.duck at springmail.com]

It's not perfect. There will be changes as the story develops, but here is an attempt at giving the reader a list of characters and definitions of terms used in the story. 

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Definitions

attacker: Province that serves the kingdom by capturing land and defending it during times of war.

Mage: Province that serves the kingdom by casting spells on enemy kingdoms, and helping attackers by weakening the targets of attackers. May also help fellow provinces by negating or cancelling enemy spells.

thief: Province that serves the kingdom by gathering intel on enemy or target provinces. May also help by stealing resources from enemy or target provinces to benefit themselves or the kingdom.

Farm: Province that provides resources to another kingdom or ruler. Doesn't do anything to help the kingdom he is in.

Inactive: Ruler that serves himself only. Doesn't do anything to help the kingdom. May also be a farm.

Science Pump: When the ruler orders the colleges of the province to train the army, mages, and thieves in the latest skills and techniques of their field.

Range of Strength

feeble: between dead and 140
weak: between 141 and 155
light: between 156 and 175
strong: between 176 and 190
powerful: between 191 and 200

Personality & specialties

Freaks: These weirdoes are highly unpredictable. The monarch that can effectively control and use these fighters may reap great benefits.
Generals: Favor Conquest .


mystics: Experts in magic and the training of wizards.

rogues: Skilled thieves. Since they come from the lowest class of people, they have few or No scruples. They are Particularly good at infiltrating magic towers to assassinate wizards; Torching Farms, & using propaganda to get enemy soldiers to defect.
Sages: Wise & efficient. Fast due to better battle tactics. Have a cure for the plague carried by the undead.

Shepherd: Humble. Expert farmers, thus able to survive drought & storm better than other provinces.

War Heroes: Rise in power quicker. Able to attract better army because of their reputation. Monarchs should keep an eye on these charismatic fighters.

Warriors: Have strong well trained and loyal armies. Tend to use mercenaries.

Members of Hades Legions (1:48)

Ruler: unknown
Race: unknown
Province: Aeosil 9 formerly of Realms United (5:35)
Role: unknown
Condition: dead

Ruler: Humble Sir Dog Breath 
Race: Dwarf shepherd
Province: Hollow Dogs
Role: small attacker
Condition: weak

Ruler: Lady Doom the Sorcerer
Race: elf mystic
Province: The Scarlet Witch
Role: medium mage / Archmage
Condition: light

Ruler: Toby the rogue
Race: Halfling rogue
Province: Walton On The Hill 
Role: large thief / Head of Thieves Guild
Condition: weak (154.8)

Ruler: Great Mr. Dragon
Race: orc general
Province: Legacy Of Dragons (1:48)
Role: attacker
Condition: weak

Ruler: Great Regis Rumble Belly
Race: undead general, 
Province: The Flatulent Legion (1:48)
Role: attacker
Condition: light

Ruler: Mr. ARRRRRGHHHHHHH the warrior 
Race: Avian warrior
Province: Avengers (16)
Role: attacker / first monarch
Condition: dead

Ruler: Sir Hound of War the warrior
Race: human warrior, 
Province: The Crystal Pond (1:48)
Role: medium attacker
Condition: unknown

Ruler: unknown
Race: Elf
Province: Boscoville (16)
Role: unknown
Condition: light (164.9)

Ruler: Dark Merlin the Sorcerer
Race: faery Mystic
Province: Dravens Darkside (9)
Role: medium mage / Minister of the Underground
Condition: unknown

Ruler: Sir Pierson the Sorcerer 
Race: faery Mystic
Province: Sworn to Penetrate (16)
Role: small mage
Condition: light (170.3)

Ruler: great Mr. moNZon
Race: human general
Province: Chinese Feet Torture (16)
Role: small attacker
Condition: light (164.3)

Ruler: great Mr. Edibo
Race: undead general
Province: Hamburger Hill (16)
Role: large attacker
Condition: strong (178.0)

Ruler: Mr. Jonny Cage the warrior
Race: unknown warrior
Province: Sykes empire (1:48)
Role: attacker
Condition: unknown

Ruler: Wise Mr. Xanthzz 
Race: dwarf Sage
Province: Sworn To Destroyz (16)
Role: small attacker
Condition: light (166.8)

Ruler: Mr. Andy the Rogue
Race: faery Rogue
Province: Sworn to LuvRei (1:48)
Role: unknown
Condition: unknown

Ruler: Great Ms. Nubian Goddess
Race: undead general
Province: Sworn to Hate (16)
Role: large attacker
Condition: powerful (194.2)

Ruler: Great Mr. Jur Gradi 
Race: undead general
Province: Sworn to Neutralize (16)
Role: large attacker
Condition: light (157.3

Ruler: Great Mr. enyce wan
Race: undead general
Province: Sworn to EnycE (16)
Role: large attacker
Condition: light (173.7)

Ruler: unknown
Race: elf
Province: Twinkle (16)
Role: unknown
Condition: weak (145.5)

Ruler: Sir Znorf the warrior
Race: Avian warrior
Province: water t0ture (16)
Role: strong attacker
Condition: light (175.5) 

Ruler: humble Sir Wizer 
Race: dwarf Shepherd
Province: Whipping Good (16)
Role: uncertain could be attacker or farm
Condition: feeble (139.5) 

Ruler: unknown
Race: undead 
Province: Shrouded Graveyard (16)
Role: small attacker
Condition: weak (148.5)

Ruler: Queen Sitting the warrior
Race: Avian warrior, bigger well trained loyal army. Uses mercenaries
Province: The Crystal Pond (16)
Role: Monarch
Condition: light (158.8)

Ruler: Heroic Mr. Fingolfin
Race: dwarf War Hero
Province: Iron Hills (16)
Role: medium attacker
Condition: feeble (138.3) 

Ruler: Mr. Astharot the Warrior
Race: dwarf warrior
Province: Sworn to destruction (16)
Role: small attacker
Condition: light (161.2) 

Ruler: Wise Mr. Ming
Race: elf Sage
Province: Sworn to Assassinate (16)
Role: large attacker
Condition: light (174.1)

members of Silent Enigma

Ruler: Humble Sir Taran of Spielburg 
Race: avian Shepherd
Province: Achlamar (8:49)
Role: large attacker
Condition: feeble (118.6)

Ruler: Great Mr. adikadik
Race: Avian general
Province: hAlA suyop (8:49)
Role: small attacker
Condition: feeble (115.0)

Ruler: Wise King Almero
Race: dwarf Sage
Province: Anathema 
Role: Monarch
Condition: feeble (103.2)

Ruler: Great Sir Raymond
Race: dwarf general 
Province: Raymondia (8:49)
Role: small attacker
Condition: feeble (118.2)
Ruler: unknown
Race: dwarf
Province: The Land of Darkness (16)
Role: small attacker
Condition: feeble (121.2)
Ruler: Sir Ludde
Race: dwarf Shepherd
Province: Mroaden (8:49)
Role: small attacker
Condition: feeble (124.0)
Ruler: unknown
Race: dwarf
Province: NVMSCHLP (16)
Role: small attacker
Condition: feeble (120.9)

Ruler: Mr. Crumble 
Race: dwarf warrior
Province: CrumbleToDust (8:49)
Role: small attacker
Condition: feeble (94.3)

Ruler: Sir NatureLore
Race: Elf Sage 
Province: Platinum Nature
Role: 
Condition: feeble (126.8)

Ruler: Mr. Toad
Race: elf warrior, bigger well trained loyal army. Uses mercenaries
Province: Slime City (8:49)
Role: small attacker 
Condition: feeble (93.2)

Ruler: Mr. Fire 
Race: elf Mystic
Province: Annihilators (8:49)
Role: small attacker/mage
Condition: light (172.8)

Ruler: Sir Link 
Race: Elf warrior
Province: The 2Towers (8:49)
Role: small attacker/mage
Condition: feeble (126.1)

Ruler: Sir Beowulf 
Race: elf Rogue
Province: Geonosian (8:49)
Role: small attacker/mage
Condition: feeble 136.5)

Ruler: unknown
Race: faery 
Province: Mendelbrot (16)
Role: small mage
Condition: feeble 126.0)

Ruler: Mr. wimpy
Race: Faery Mystic
Province: I'm with her (8:49)
Role: small mage
Condition: feeble (104.2)

Ruler: Sir Fly the Rogue
Race: Halfling Rogue
Province: Farius (8:49)
Role: small thief
Condition: light (159.4) 

Ruler: Sir Bozeman 
Race: Halfling Rogue
Province: Broadmoor (8:49)
Role: small thief
Condition: feeble (117.4)

Ruler: Sir Death 
Race: Halfling Rogue
Province: Death Gates (8:49)
Role: small thief
Condition: feeble (139.2)

Ruler: Sir Robin Hood the Rogue
Race: Halfling Rogue
Province: The Fens (8:49)
Role: small thief/mage
Condition: feeble (140.4)

Ruler: Sir Dark Lighter 
Race: Halfling Rogue
Province: Realm of Faith (8:49)
Role: small thief
Condition: feeble (138.7) 

Ruler: unknown
Race: human
Province: Lok (16)
Role: unknown
Condition: weak (145.5)

Ruler: unknown
Race: Orc 
Province: gotar (16)
Role: medium attacker
Condition: feeble (113.9)

Ruler: Sir Rippz 
Race: Orc War Hero
Province: The Ripper 
Role: unknown
Condition: feeble (83.5)

Ruler: unknown
Race: undead
Province: Free (16)
Role: unknown
Condition: feeble (132.7)

Provinces outside the kingdoms
Kingdom: formerly in Hades Legions
Ruler: humble Mr Pez gordo
Race: dwarf Shepherd
Province: Torre de queso

Kingdom: The Dread Lands
Ruler: King Dinh San the Rogue 
Race: Dark Elf rogue
Province: Dread Daemon 

Kingdom: Creeping Darkness
Ruler: 
race: unknown
Province: insane shadow 

Kingdom: Creeping Darkness
Ruler: unknown
Race: unknown
Province: Void Shadow 

Kingdom: Creeping Darkness
Ruler: unknown
Race: human
Province: shadow mhail's 

Friends, allies and other characters 

3 headed red dragon
Hired by Silent Enigma to destroy The Crystal Castle. Killed by the School of Fish in the crystal pond and mounted on the roof of Sittings castle so it looks like it is on guard and about to pounce on any intruder.

Anthonee
lead thief in crystal pond Formerly the queen ant

carrier
a magic device given to Sitting by Dark Merlin the faery ruler of draven's dark side. It fastens on top of her head and let's sitting see through Grasshoppers eyes when the windshield is raised. When the visor is pulled down and snapped into place over the windshield, it makes them invisible. It was later made stronger when Dread Demon had one of his craftsmen repair it.

Caster
leader of flock of griffins. Former leader of the katydids,” 

Driver
lead drake in Chrystal pond. Former queen bee.

duck family
family of ducks that Sitting lived with before they started south for the winter. used to pick on Sitting, steal her food, and abandoned her to walk south on her own.

Fire Light
lead wizard in crystal pond. Former mother of the firefly larva in the pond beside the rear battlement of the castle.

fireflies
Insects living at the puddle near the back corner of the castle. 

flock of sheep & goats in barn
Flock Encountered at the farm by Sitting and Grasshopper as they flew south on their way out of the Realm of Heroes.

Fuchsia
former queen fish #2 now a harpy with all the fish who are now harpies

Grasshopper
Grasshopper sitting met on her way south.

human farmer
Human at the province with the sheep. 

katydids 
swarm of insects living in the forest by the crystal pond.

lead fish #1
leader of the school of fish in the Crystal Pond. 

lead fish #2
took over control of the pool of fish in the crystal pond when the original lead fish was killed.

male & female fox
Pair of foxes hunting at the abandoned castle.

queen ant
queen of the colony of ants in the back yard of the castle. 

queen bee
queen of the bee hive sheltering in the left rear battlement of the castle.

snail
snail at the puddle where Sitting met the fireflies.