[Critique Group 1] submission reminder plus Leonard's sub.

[tuchyner5 at aol.com]

Hi Group1,


 


Just a reminder that submissions  are due tomorrow.  Below you will find my submission.  See yu next Wednesday.


 



 


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 You Looking at Me?


 


Rabbit sits insolently silent,

staring up from the back yard garden,

locking eyes with a grizzled old dog

regarding Rabbit from high on his porch.


 


“Hey, you used-up mutt, you looking at me?”


 


“Hare, better be careful what you blather.”


 


“Why, what you gonna do to me?”


 


“I might just have you for my breakfast.

I used to eat rabbit regularly.”


 


“Yeah, used to is what I say, old schmo.

You’re so slow you couldn’t catch a cold.”


 


Old Dog grins at rabbit’s arrogance.


 


“How old are you, rabbit-flavored dog food?

Couldn’t be more than a season or two.

I’ll give you fast, but nothing for smart.

You’ll never make it past the fence.”


 


Rabbit smiles and skips a backwards flip.

“Dog breath, you got nothing. You can’t touch this.

You’re just a bunch of barks and farts.

Hey, hay. Now don’t go falling down those stairs.

You’re too smelly for me to get you up.

Uh oh!” 


 


Like lightening, old dog rockets off the porch.

For a time fraction, rabbit freezes,

then scampers to his rent in the fence. 


 


“I gotta admit, you had me scared.

Guess you still got a little juice left,

but I can see it leaking out.

You ain’t never gonna catch me, no way.”


 


Suddenly, Rabbit is lifted off the ground.

>From behind, canine teeth have grabbed his scruff.


 


Fido says, “Timing was perfect, Old Dog.”

Old Dog says,

“We make a damn good team, neighbor,

but if it is all the same to you,

let’s let the whippersnapper go this time.

I admire his audacity.

He’ll be more of a challenge come winter.”
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