[Critique Group 1] Marcia's April submission (two poems)

[Marcia Wick]

I hope I'm not "cheating" by submitting two poems.my first attempts.

 

Velveteen Viviane (an ABC poem)

Marcia J. Wick, The Write Sisters

April 2018

Word Count: 86 

 

Velveteen wings the color of caramel top off your bright yellow coat.

Inviting eyes framed by those soft floppy ears entice me to walk by your
side.

Visions of the trails we will travel gleam through marble windows from your
soul.

Indicating obstacles, you dance a subtle two-step and we continue on our
way.

Always with an eye on me, we journey like corduroy side-by-side,

Never one to hesitate, you harness up to lead the way,

Ever special partners, Viviane earns her belly rub each day.

 

 

You and Me

Marcia J. Wick, The Write Sisters

April 2018

Word Count:  136

 

I hear you shouting, though I know it's not at me.

You don't see me by your side, as you cross your arms and glare.

The man who sometimes feeds me is screaming back at you. 

When he slams the door, you are not alone.

 

You heard me yelling, but I'm not mad at you.

"Good girl, sweet pea," I murmur, scratching velvet ears.

I plunge into the cushion, hoping to be rescued.

like the Unsinkable Molly Brown,

 

I plop my furry head onto your bare feet,

Pinning you down for now, for ever.

I roll onto my back, no harness in the way 

As you stroke my soft belly.

 

You cover my cold feet with your warm body,

There's no escaping your affection.

Guiding or playing, Your devotion is true.

You soothe my hurting heart.

 

 

 

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