<div style="font-size:10pt;font-family:arial,helvetica,sans-serif;color:black;"><div style="font-family:arial,helvetica,sans-serif;font-size:10pt;color:black;"><br><br><br>-----Original Message-----<br>From: tuchyner5--- via Group2 <group2@bluegrasspals.com><br>To: tuchyner5@aol.com<br>Cc: Critique Group 2 <group2@bluegrasspals.com><br>Sent: Fri, Jun 25, 2021 4:09 pm<br>Subject: [Critique Group 2] Leonard's comments on Alice's piece<br><br></div><div id="yiv2665926993"><div style="font-size:10pt;font-family:arial, helvetica, sans-serif;color:black;"><p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">I<u> really <span style=""> </span>liked this poem. </u></span></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">It takes one who thinks out of the box, </span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">even when it is unpopular.<span style=""> </span></span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Using the statue as an impetus<span style=""> </span>for a poem<span style="">
</span></span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">who’s theme would be opposite to the motives of
those who were responsible<span style=""> </span>for its
creation, </span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">is a powerful thing to do.<span style=""> </span></span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">You make your point </span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">which is sharpened by the conflict </span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">which the statue creates in you. </span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">You have wishes for the homeless and want to
know what they wish for.<i></i></span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Alice sub for June 17</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" align="center" style="margin-bottom:0in;text-align:center;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Monumental
Wishes for a Homeless Person</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" align="center" style="margin-bottom:0in;text-align:center;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" align="center" style="margin-bottom:0in;text-align:center;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Clever play on words.</span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" align="center" style="margin-bottom:0in;text-align:center;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" align="center" style="margin-bottom:0in;text-align:center;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">poem
by Alice Jane-Marie Massa</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Behind the Cathedral of Saint John,</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">right on the edge of the sidewalk</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">along the busy VanBuren Street</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">is a most unusual monument--</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">a monument of a cemented homeless person</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">lying on a concrete bench and</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">covered by a cement newspaper.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> <b><u>The word cement is used very
effectively.</u></b></span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">I wish that all of the money</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">that went into the making of this monument</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">would have gone to a monolithic soup kitchen.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">I do wonder what the homeless residents</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">think of this statue in repose.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">I find it abruptly inappropriate.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> <b><u>There is no hiding of your feelings
about this statue.</u></b></span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">I do wish all the homeless people in Milwaukee</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Could find peace and shelter.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">For what do they wish?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">You wish they weren’t homeless.</span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Does he wish to be out of the cold,</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">not on the streets growing too quickly too old?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Does she wish to be away from the dampness, out
of the rain?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Does she wonder what else her life could
contain?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Does he wish to be drunk or wish to be sober?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Does he sometimes wish his life were over?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Does she too often dream of a well-rounded meal?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Is she here and there too tempestuously tempted
to steal?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">This is a great list of things that describes
the state of homelessness.</span></u></b><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Do you always wish for a better tomorrow?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Please let us know how we can lessen your
sorrow,</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">how we can make one wish come true.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">You are looking for directgions<span style=""> </span>from the people who would be helped. </span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">How original.</span></u></b><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">I heard you once played a saxophone,</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">then sold the instrument for a cellular phone.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">Whom do you call when you are here all alone?</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><b><u><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">That is a startling question. </span></u></b></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;">I pray all will be kind to you.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> </span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"><span style=""> </span>So, you,
too, be kind, stay well, and give me your wishes.</span></p>
<p class="yiv2665926993MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:0in;line-height:normal;background:white;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:sans-serif;color:black;"> <b><u>I like the ending.</u></b></span></p>
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