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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Deanna May<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Coyote Learns To Sing<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Unclear: </span>Spotted Pony Boy searched through the brush moving further<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Spotted Pony Boy searched through the brush for his lost arrow, moving further<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Wrong word?: </span>as he is wont to do. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: as he is want to do. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Extra spaces before new paragraph, should be blank line.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Transition: She began. “One day, <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Insert commas: </span>Quickly he ran down a hill and in a sheltered dip in the land he found a small bird building his nest. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Try: </span>Quickly, he ran down a hill and, in a sheltered dip in the land, he found a small bird building his nest. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Punctuation inside quote: </span>what is that lovely sound," he asked?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: what is that lovely sound?” he asked.<span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>NICE dialogue: </span>"Ouch! Mind the feathers," cried the frightened bird. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>INCOMPLETE SENTENCE: </span>But little rock said nothing. For it is not in his nature to talk much.<span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>TRY: </span>But little rock said nothing for it was not in his nature to talk much.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Concluding quotes marks: Coyote has been singing like that ever since.”<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Insert comma: </span>Grandmother Spider said "Any new thing that<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Grandmother Spider said, "Any new thing that<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Closing quote mark: </span>someday you will be a great hunter.” <span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora May<span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Worthy of Their Hire<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='color:#1F497D'>Use question mark: </span>What is equal pay for the same work.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='color:#1F497D'>Try: </span>What is equal pay for the same work?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='color:#1F497D'>Use dash: </span>20-plus years<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Reword: </span>and I find that they mostly receive the same pay for showing up, they do not all provide the same work for that pay.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Try: </span>and I find that<span style='color:#1F497D'>,</span> although they receive the same pay for showing up, they <span style='color:#1F497D'>don’t </span>all provide the same work for that pay.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Reword: </span>a number of tasks to be completed as well and as quickly as possible.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Try: </span>a list of tasks to be completed as well and as quickly as possible.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: has left them with the mental idea that one or two tasks completed in a day is good enough, and men had a job to get done and put their mind and body to work to complete it as soon as possible.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: has left them with the idea that one or two tasks completed in a day is good enough, while men see a job to <span style='color:#1F497D'>be done </span>and put their mind and body to work to complete it as soon as possible.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: Salaries pay people for the job, but leaves the worker open to employers that add more and more work without fair compensation.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Salaries may pay people the same for <span style='color:#1F497D'>a particular </span>job, but <span style='color:#1F497D'>that </span>leave<span style='color:#1F497D'>s</span> workers open to employers that demand more and more work <span style='color:#1F497D'>from salaried workers </span>without fair compensation.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>I take some exception to this statement as a single working parent</span>: one or two tasks completed in a day is good enough<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard May 21, 2021<span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>Growing Gap</span><span style='font-size:12.0pt;line-height:105%;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif;color:black'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'> </span><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Incomplete sentence: <span style='color:black'>night after <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Try: <span style='color:black'>I heard her voice the night after <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>a faint echo of her presence <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>floated far from the world. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Delete commas: <span style='color:black'>Time went by, and her face began to fade, <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>until I couldn’t see her anymore --</span><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>try: <span style='color:black'>Time went by and her face began to fade <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>until I couldn’t see her anymore --<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>reword “periods”: <span style='color:black'>except in unexpected periods --</span><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>try: <span style='color:black'>except in unexpected moments--<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>delete comma: <span style='color:black'>or sighting someone in a swarm,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>sporting something she used to wear. </span><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Try: <span style='color:black'>or sighting someone in a swarm<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>sporting something she used to wear. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Sally May<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal> Liminal Time<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Liminal – you’ve taught me another new word!<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Again I learn new “old” expressions: </span>Widow’s weeds<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>and</span><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>“turn the conversation”<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:#1F497D'>Love these powerful strong words: </span>As the raw shock of loss lessened and I was left with occasional waves of sorrow,<span style='color:#1F497D'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>