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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72" style='word-wrap:break-word'><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sun was bright and shiny. Perhaps brightly shining.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Hum, usually means to vocalize a melody. Perhaps, Hunh! Means surprised sound.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Soaking my feet in the floorboard. Perhaps soaking my feet and the floorboard.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Interesting and holds the reader until the conclusion.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal> Marcia<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Time camera, Perhaps time elapse camera<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>It will tell the story, perhaps the truth will bee revealed. Thus you won’t need to have the word story in two adjacent sentences. Well written essay.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>In the sentence beginning: Initially , after the word (and) you need a space between the words (as) and the word (a)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>You need a period after the word solace.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>You have an extra periodafter the word surface. Some of your sentences were long, but I liked the way you handled your feelings. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal> <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna Quietwater Noriega<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cell: 573-544-3511<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Email: <a href="mailto:dqnoriega@gmail.com"><span style='color:#0563C1'>dqnoriega@gmail.com</span></a><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Author of <i>Fifty Years of Walking with Friends<o:p></o:p></i></p><p class=MsoNormal><i>https://www.dldbooks.com/dqnoriega/</i><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>